Poetry Forum

Noiseless, little spider stood right there
where I’d like to go. Where I’m busy, crazy
or just plain happy and next to everything.
You must consider that I won’t speak for months.
Maybe because I’m reading old letters,
facing the mirror contemplating thoughts
that do not concern you my dear. I’m having a good,
bad dream and a phase that goes through it all.
Or I’m content like a pack full of cigarettes.
Again and again however will I go.
What is so special about those cellar door?
Nevertheless your pretty blue eyes have to wait 3
maybe 4 days before I get up and decide either way.
Because it’s so damn frustrating to be right
and not being able to simply go nuts.

Ewan,

Your poems are never less than interesting, often intriguing. Have you been reading Walt Whitman?

"and next to everything." could mean so much?

"Or I’m content like a pack full of cigarettes." here are you personifying the cigarrettes ?

Unfortunately its very difficult to string the obscurites together, it seems like fragments from many poems!

Still, some exciting language used.

cheers
Kris

Yes I've been reading Walt Whitman for a long time.
I know it might be chaotic but I wanted to get opinions in order to improve.

Thank you very much Camus.