Poetry Forum

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TOO MUCH DEPENDANCY
FAR TOO MUCH RELIANCE
AND WHEN THINGS GO WRONG
WE BLAME IT ON THE SCIENCE

A DIGITAL LAMENT
A DIGITAL LAMENT

WHERE'S OUR CONTINGENCY
WHERE'S THE FORWARD PLANNING
THE MODERN AGE DOES WITHOUT
HUMAN INTERACTION

A DIGITAL LAMENT
A DIGITAL LAMENT

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i like the jerky way it progresses from line to line to stanza, it is pretty reminiscent of something mechanical. It seems u intended this to be a song perhaps? either way i would love to see more to it, good theme and integration of the theme into the construction.

Absolutely spot on Az. This is a song. Won't be everyones cup of tea coz it's shouted along to Hardcore Punk. But I like the challenge of avoiding cliches in that genre of music and try out lyrics that are challenging.

Glad you enjoyed it. Cheers.