Sergant

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Is this dramatic?

Poll ended at Mon Jan 10, 2005 10:02 am

Yes
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67%
No
1
33%
It would be if it were written properly...!
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Total votes: 3
Delboy
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Location: newcastle upon tyne

Wed Jan 05, 2005 10:02 am

Sergant...

How come i am killing?
How come i have blood on my hands?
How come i know not of the value of life?

How come sergant? How come?

Sergant...

Why has that man just been shot?
Why has that woman just been raped?
Why has that village just been blown up?

Why sergant? Why?

Sergant...

When did we start murdering man?
When did we sink to this level?
When did we loose our heads?

When sergant? When?

Sergant...

How come i have been brought up like this? How come?
Why have i been brought into a world of murder, rape and violence? Why?
When was i mature enough to witness this? When?

Sergant...

Sergant...

Father...

I am only 7 years old...
GeeKay
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Joined: Wed Jan 05, 2005 12:49 am

Wed Jan 05, 2005 1:31 pm

Really enjoyed reading this one. Nice flow to it. :D
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