Decease and Desist

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GeeKay
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Sat Jan 08, 2005 5:38 pm

Decease and desist
Who cares if we exist
Damage done, it's too late
What comes next will seal our fate
Decease and desist
All this beauty will be missed
Leave this place to the rats
To thrive in this gaunt habitat
Decease and desist
Hope was to be reminisced
Some goodness in humanity?
An undiscerning vanity
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Sat Jan 08, 2005 5:49 pm

GeeK,
(ha)
Nice job, very effective repetition. This poem was short and to the point, it isn't personally my style, but it worked well.
.tg.
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