Thu Mar 27, 2008 11:59 pm
I like this - I can't see why it should be, or how it could be expanded. I would say that everything's summed up in four lines. Sounds like the counsellor's done the opposite of divide and conquer - kicks the zen approach in touch too.
now my hell and I are one.
Again I disagree with David - I don't have a problem with the syntax in L3.
I do have a problem with the rhythm in L2 - the counselling was no fun
My life was in a million pieces;
counselling was never fun.
But oh what traumas talking teases-
now my hell and I are one. - reads better (to my ears anyway).
nice one
Barrie
After letting go of branches and walking through the ape gait, we managed to grasp what hands were really for......