Bird Song

[the stranger]

Shrill in this
tin wire cage,

I try to explain that;

Rain is my favourite
type of melancholy,

melancholy is my favourite
type of look,

look is my favourite
type of showing,

that I am a poet
in a cage of shame

able to sing
but never fly.

[blueknight]

I can't quite put my finger on why i like this poem...i read it half a dozen times, its filled with metaphors of anger, frustration and sadness, its very origional and for such a short poem it is filled with substance of that which i have already suggested...i guess thats why i liked it. Good post.

[camus]

bump,

last one for now.

These seem a lifetime away.

[bis]

i really like this

the progression of "melancholy" and then "look" from stanza to stanza gives it a really nice rythm.

the conciseness of it gives it the frustration that i think is meant to be felt as it all feels vey pent upand just below the surface

i like the idea of a poet "able to sing/ but never fly."

i think it really nicely sums up the frustration felt in any creative process

i'm definitely feeling it

[Sean Kinsella]

Yep, I liked this one as well

sentiment such as...

" Shrill in this
tin wire cage,

I try to explain that;
Rain is my favourite
type of melancholy,"

and then...

"look is my favourite
type of showing,

that I am a poet
in a cage of shame"

I like the way in which this poem is an utterly interlocked operation, and it works well.

BEST REGARDS
SEAN KINSELLA