echinocardiac attack (Exp - bones)

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oranggunung
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Thu Apr 24, 2008 6:21 pm

urchin
pale and brittle
void exoskeleton
crumpled on the floor, returning
to sand
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davelord
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Thu Apr 24, 2008 7:17 pm

Aww poor urchin. I felt really sorry for the poor creature after reading this. I hope he had a happy urchin life.
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