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Social Intercourse

Posted: Mon Apr 11, 2005 5:23 pm
by clion
Talk and Conversation.

Some people like to chatter on,
their voices sound an endless song,
never wavering or deterred
by futile interjecting word.

Rushing onward with their passage
to joyously present the message.
What they have to say can't wait,
in Rudeness Stakes a Silver Plate.

Courtesy, manners and conversation
all sacrificed in competition
to utter words that forms a block,
so companions make no answer back.

A dialogue so sweet and gentle,
may soon decay and disassemble
and monologue ensue from there,
assailing gratingly, the ear.

Posted: Mon Apr 11, 2005 6:01 pm
by pseud
May I suggest that you start reviewing other poems and chiming in every once in a while? I personally don't mind, but I fear the moderators will start deleting these poems. So say the rules.

I'm curious to know what the actual title of the poem is - Social Intercourse, or Talk and Conversation. You actually threw me off with that your last poem as well. But it matters little. Titles are generally easy to replace and easy to come by.

It is an all around good poem - my favorite of the three you've posted. One thing I saw that I thought worthy of mentioning:

"Courtesy, manners and conversation
all sacrificed in competition
to utter words that forms a block,
so companions make no answer back."

This stanza seems to me to hold the most substance in the poem, but it also seems to be the least eloquent.

Nice to meet you,
Caleb

Posted: Mon Apr 11, 2005 7:18 pm
by Bombadil
Eh?

No need to critique to contribute, as far as I know...


Clion,

I like this. More specifically, I like how and what you're doing with your implications...

--A.S.

Posted: Mon Apr 11, 2005 7:26 pm
by pseud
"Therefore, we will be implementing a much stricter policy from now on. Every poster should review at least one poem every time they submit one of their own. Posters who consistently post and do not review will have their work removed from the forum."

It's from an announcement entitled "REVIEW REVIEW REVIEW" posted by Nicola last year...up at the top of this very forum. I don't know if it is still in effect, but that's what I've gone by.

Of course it could have been a practical joke.

Posted: Mon Apr 11, 2005 8:05 pm
by The Moose
Huh.

Never read that myself. No disrespect meant to Nicola, of course.

The 300+ club is gonna have a field day.



Seems oddly a propo to be having this discussion under a poem about flippant critics. I'm amused.

The Moose.

Posted: Mon Apr 11, 2005 8:37 pm
by pseud
Now that's not fair. Annoying speakers in general have their place in this piece - not just me!

I'm still too used to other much stricter forums. I should have known you were all too far relaxed and understanding of the creative mind to hold someone to a rule like that. Ironically, it's what makes this place great.

Still the moderators say nothing...

Posted: Mon Apr 11, 2005 8:56 pm
by Bombadil
I suppose if the law fits, don't break it. For the sake of the more easily bruised egos out there (not just here), I stick to the old adage: "If you can't say anything good, then don't say anything at all." So, I critique those which I can find at least one positive thing to comment on.

For me, silence is its own criticism, and one of the sternest.

Posted: Mon Apr 11, 2005 8:59 pm
by camus
Now listen here,

I'm a modern rator, and I'll have no fucking more of this you here, no more.

I had to edit this 3 times, but kept in the modern rator, now take me seriously goddam you.

Posted: Mon Apr 11, 2005 9:03 pm
by pseud
:shock: now what did I do?

Posted: Mon Apr 11, 2005 9:05 pm
by that girl
poor Caleb...

Posted: Mon Apr 11, 2005 9:24 pm
by pseud
all one has to do is act wounded and you all turn to putty - is that it?

Thanks for the sympathy all the same.

What do you two think of the rule, camus and tg?

Posted: Mon Apr 11, 2005 9:27 pm
by Bombadil
Goddamned cynical arsehole....beware the modern rator!










(kidding, of course...)

Posted: Mon Apr 11, 2005 9:33 pm
by camus
I despise rules in general, you should act on your own morals, and so therefore of course it makes sense to at least try to critique the odd poem, only fair really.

It is difficult to find something to say on every poem posted, and that behaviour shouldn't really be encouraged, or you WILL find yourself in a "Love In"

But everything in moderation.

No offence to Cam or Nicola, this is a fine fine forum, rules are rules, but the sensible can surely ignore them.

Posted: Mon Apr 11, 2005 9:49 pm
by camus
(kidding, of course...)

of course.

Posted: Tue Apr 12, 2005 9:09 am
by cameron
Hi Guys and Gals

Sorry for delay in responding to this one. We've been busy re-jigging the glossary of poetic terms .

The 'Review, Review, Review' post was written a long time ago before the forum really got going and all you intelligent people joined. (We've now taken it off and amalgamated it with the guidelines). I think it's really just a question of 'give and take' not an absolute decree. Obviously the forum will only work if people get their poems reviewed but hey 'go with the flow'. If you've got nothing to say about a poem, then say nothing.

I kinda assumed no-one reads the rules anyway.

You're all doing very well

Cheers
Cam

Posted: Wed Apr 13, 2005 12:05 am
by alex69williams
Thankyou, Mr Self :oops: :roll: