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Spin wheel of time,
but keep me in my age,
Do you want me to change,
or waste my life dreaming?

Ah, but you cannot keep me!
I have a plan.
A quick Fix to escape,
time will awake, but I will arise.

So I run,
jump out from meniality
to Soar above the hoards.
A smile greets my face,
but look ahead

One, another, a Million more,
all with the same idea.
The same above as below,
I need an escape from escape.

My wings are crushed by those around,
I cannot Soar away,
so they cause me to fall.

Panic stricken! where do I retreat!?

It all makes sense now.

Come Wheel of Time,
Catch me in your Cycle.

JAMES

I liked the enchanting feel of the first verse...

"Spin wheel of time
but keep me in my age
do you want me to change
or waste my life dreaming".

the last line in the 2nd verse is nice...

"time will awake, but I will arise"

as is this...

"jump out from meniality
to soar above the hoards"

the last 4 lines where you descend into panic and then appeal to the wheel of time are a little weak, and maybe you could look at them again.

But some nice lines to work with...no question about it.

BEST REGARDS
SEAN KINSELLA

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