Sample first chapter from my new novel

[cmtusa]

I'm interested in what people think of the first chapter of my new novel. You can read it here:

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Thanks,

Chris

[Nicola]

Hi Chris

Just thought I'd remind you of the rules.

1. Please review at least 1 other piece of prose before posting your own. Try to make your reviews constructive.

2. Please don't post your whole novel. Reading large chunks of prose on a computer screen can be very daunting. Select only a representative section which you think will grab the reader's attention - probably 1000 words max. You can always post more later if it is well received.

There are a lot of people on this forum willing to give up their time to review the work of others. You will get far more response to your prose if you contribute in the same way.

Thanks
Nicola