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Plays flute to the cow's
insistent bassoonery.
Sheep buffoonery.
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Sun Apr 11, 2010 3:06 pm

Sheep buffoonery
but here comes the crafty fox
to devour a lamb.
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
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Wed Apr 14, 2010 12:44 pm

to devour the lamb
i need fangs
not fork & knife
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Wed Apr 14, 2010 2:47 pm

Not fork and knife
Nor coffee mug can help me
Make a Sunday lunch
"Go confidently in the direction of your dreams! Live the life you've imagined. As you simplify your life, the laws of the universe will be simpler." Henry David Thoreau
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Wed Apr 14, 2010 3:09 pm

make a Sunday lunch
in the rain without raincoats
we sing we dance wild
Aim, then, to be aimless.
Seek neither publication, nor acclaim:
Submit without submitting.

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we dance wild
we are moonshades swaying to
aborigine beat
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Sat Apr 24, 2010 3:59 pm

aborigine beats
pound my inside
adieu
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Fri Apr 30, 2010 8:01 am

adieu mes amis
parting is such sweet sorrow
I’m all clichéd out
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I’m all clichéd out
actions speak louder than words --
silence is golden.
War does not determine who is right - only who is left. (Bertrand Russell)
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golden
the river-thread
on heart valley
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Fri Jun 04, 2010 2:53 pm

Aru

You don’t make this easy … I’m going to take a few liberties …


River-thread valley
Silver vein on a lined face
Crying Mountain’s tears
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Thu Jun 17, 2010 3:35 pm

Og, sorry for this late reply:

mountain's tears
giver birth to a river
golden thread at dusk

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golden threads at dusk
spiders drawing down the night
a novel webcast
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Thu Jun 24, 2010 1:25 pm

novel webcast
not so novel
her antics
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Sun Jun 27, 2010 11:08 am

her antics
with allusion and semantics
my misdirection
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Sat Jul 03, 2010 12:46 pm

my misdirection
sent him, knowing all the while
of lurkers hidden
Music expresses that which cannot be put into words. Where words fail - music speaks - Anne Rice
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hidden
within depths of snow
flattened rose
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Fri Jul 09, 2010 8:34 pm

Flattened rose:
in pages of history
between the twin thorns.
War does not determine who is right - only who is left. (Bertrand Russell)
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Fri Jul 09, 2010 9:35 pm

between the twin thorns
of rome and athens
castor and pollux arise
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Sun Jul 18, 2010 8:54 am

arises
orange sun
behind Stonehenge
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Wed Jul 21, 2010 5:10 pm

Behind Stonehenge?
No! On the center altar!
Your sacrifice waits.
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Thu Jul 22, 2010 5:03 pm

Your sacrifice waits
robed in white
kneeling before you
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Sun Jul 25, 2010 11:14 am

before you
the ripened sun
rotund tomato
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rotund tomato shaped
head of a man
bobs on the water
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waters
cry for lost ships
dusk deepens
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