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oranggunung
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Tue Oct 26, 2010 7:26 pm

And nothing really
hurts more than a well-placed kick
with a metric foot.
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Thu Oct 28, 2010 11:10 am

Wth a metric foot
he tried seducing ladies,
failing as a rule.
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Sun Oct 31, 2010 6:30 pm

Failing as a rule -
Ethelred the unready’s
came as a surprise
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Sat Nov 13, 2010 10:47 pm

came as a surprise,
seeing the same expression
within the cat's eyes
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Tue Nov 16, 2010 9:57 pm

within the cat's eyes --
spring remembered basking steps
slight hibernation.
War does not determine who is right - only who is left. (Bertrand Russell)
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Sat Nov 20, 2010 7:56 pm

"Slight hibernation"
was the game she tried to play,
she wanted his cave.
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Mon Nov 22, 2010 7:44 am

she wanted his cave;
prehistoric divorce court
didn't yet exist
"Don't treat your common sense like an umbrella. When you come into a room to philosophize, don't leave it outside, but bring it in with you." Wittgenstein
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Sat Nov 27, 2010 9:49 am

didn't yet exist

didn't yet exist
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Sat Nov 27, 2010 7:15 pm

didn’t yet exist -
the headlines for tomorrow –
until today’s news
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Sat Nov 27, 2010 7:37 pm

until today's news
autumn's road- a deep cut rut,
the freeze changed all that.
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Sun Nov 28, 2010 5:17 pm

the freeze changed all that
the palette washed, canvas cleared
time and space frozen
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Time and space frozen
expired shelf life tundra-
corn always on top.
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Fri Dec 03, 2010 3:49 pm

Corn always on top
Daddy jiggling our mammy
punch line on the pop
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Sun Dec 05, 2010 11:32 am

Punch line on the top
tainted goods in the middle
bottom line deceit.
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Mon Dec 13, 2010 11:12 am

Bottom line deceit.
Accounting false promises
in joyless profit.
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Sat Dec 18, 2010 10:45 am

in joyless profit
piled to reach a far star-
false good intentions.
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Sun Dec 19, 2010 10:27 am

intentions
of a winter wind
rattle the window
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Tue Jan 11, 2011 2:14 pm

Rattle the window,
shout at the thumping night sky,
turn away and fly.
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Tue Jan 11, 2011 3:38 pm

Turn away and fly
feel the lift beneath your wings
leave the weight behind.
Marc
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Wed Jan 12, 2011 12:11 pm

Leave the weight behind.
Every tortured, pounding step
sheds Christmas surplus.
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Wed Jan 12, 2011 12:26 pm

sheds Christmas surplus
one, two round coins at a time
until nil again.
Marc
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Wed Jan 12, 2011 2:04 pm

Until Nils again
comes round with vodka slammers
warming the new year.
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Wed Jan 12, 2011 2:39 pm

Warming the new year
Fresh imaginings flicker
As days grow longer.
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Sat Jan 22, 2011 6:28 pm

As days grow longer
The fears of the longest nights
Fade into the past.
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Sun Jan 23, 2011 11:03 am

fade into the past
blend perspectives into one-
life blooms at each bend.
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