Haiku Train

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Sun Jan 23, 2011 12:17 pm

Life blooms at each bend
of life's river as we pass
journeying onward.
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Sun Jan 23, 2011 12:36 pm

journeying onward
dry-bark chips crushed beneath boots
fog filled forest trail.
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Tue Jan 25, 2011 3:16 pm

Fog filled forest trail
luring me to walk below
foreign undergrowth.
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Tue Jan 25, 2011 3:38 pm

Foreign undergrowth:
Velvet green moss, pink heather,
Raspberry brambles.
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Wed Jan 26, 2011 4:31 pm

Raspberry brambles.
Tiny wild hearts at our feet,
strawberry rambles.
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Strawberry rambles
Talks with walks and blueberries
Homemade pie kisses.
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Homemade pie kisses
The palate as I sip wine
Blending piquancy.

Author's note - was unsure as to whether to use singular or plural (in L3), feel free to use either :)
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Thu Jan 27, 2011 12:13 pm

Blending piquancy,
Blue cheese aged in Switzerland
With chilled Pinot Noir.
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Sun Jan 30, 2011 9:03 pm

With chilled Pinot Noir
The day looks different now
And night-time beckons.
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Sat Feb 05, 2011 4:54 pm

And night-time beckons
old beginnings now reborn
vegetarian
Starting down road to knowledge leads to a view of reality that is bleaker than the warm comfort blanket of ignorance. A road we take with no route back. Where there was something, there is nothing.
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Sat Feb 05, 2011 5:18 pm

Vegetarian,
Stop your sly sideways glancing
Legatarian
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Sat Feb 05, 2011 6:44 pm

"Legatarian"
Archaic recollections
By leporicide.
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Sat Feb 05, 2011 6:53 pm

By leporicide!
She thought him ingenious!
Pelts of fur and stew!
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Sat Feb 05, 2011 6:58 pm

By leporicide
the hares will all die quickly
reborn as fur hats
Starting down road to knowledge leads to a view of reality that is bleaker than the warm comfort blanket of ignorance. A road we take with no route back. Where there was something, there is nothing.
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Reborn as fur hats,
Slippers and lucky keychains,
sweet white winter muffs
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Sat Feb 05, 2011 7:35 pm

Sweet white winter muffs
warming the tree's wooden hands
nature's gentle care
Starting down road to knowledge leads to a view of reality that is bleaker than the warm comfort blanket of ignorance. A road we take with no route back. Where there was something, there is nothing.
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Sat Feb 05, 2011 11:38 pm

Nature's gentle care
Morning songs in bare treetops
Afternoons lakeside.
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Sun Feb 06, 2011 3:34 pm

Afternoons lakeside
memories light the present
dimming of his youth.
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Sun Feb 06, 2011 6:01 pm

dimming of his youth:
bright larva to chrysalis -
butterfly awakes
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Butterfly awakes
the buddleia shines brightly
calling him to feed.
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Sun Feb 06, 2011 10:33 pm

calling him to feed
the strong scent of fresh blood spilt
the shark strikes to kill
Starting down road to knowledge leads to a view of reality that is bleaker than the warm comfort blanket of ignorance. A road we take with no route back. Where there was something, there is nothing.
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Mon Feb 07, 2011 12:32 pm

The shark strikes to kill
Aqua waters swirl discret
Pandemonium.
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Wed Feb 09, 2011 11:26 am

Pandemonium -
curious name for a dog
with little collar
War does not determine who is right - only who is left. (Bertrand Russell)
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Thu Feb 10, 2011 7:11 pm

With little collar
With short leash, within a space
He left her swinging.
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Fri Feb 11, 2011 7:33 pm

He left her swinging
oak-cloaked branch and bare shoulders,
stole her dancing shoes.
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