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RichardSanders
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Mon Oct 24, 2011 10:38 pm

Too fruity by half
my healthy insanity
life's equalizer
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Wed Oct 26, 2011 5:20 am

life's equalizer
fires howitzers at the rich
sign up on the left
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Wed Oct 26, 2011 7:08 am

Sign up on the left.
Walk briskly, fly into it.
There'll be nothing left.
dedalus
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Wed Oct 26, 2011 9:32 am

There'll be nothing left,
there goes the chocolate cake --
Ma will go postal
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Wed Oct 26, 2011 10:03 am

Ma will go postal
Pa, pharmaceutical
Both flying somewhere.
RichardSanders
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Wed Oct 26, 2011 11:36 am

Both flying somewhere
as kamikaze pilots
with chemical bonds
Moth
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Wed Oct 26, 2011 12:22 pm

With chemical bonds
they are destined to marry
till pheromones part
to be totally honest... whenever you feel you really shouldn't write that, that's exactly what you should write.
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Thu Oct 27, 2011 5:56 am

Till pheromones part
they will love the fuck out of
each other. Till death.
There's only one rule in street and bar fights: maximum violence, instantly. (Martin Amis, "Money")
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Thu Oct 27, 2011 7:40 am

Each other, till death,
the two arctic pines entwine
with roots in sand soil.
RichardSanders
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Thu Oct 27, 2011 9:47 am

with roots in sand soil
competing for sustenance
love's eternal strife
Suzanne
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Thu Oct 27, 2011 9:51 am

love's eternal strife;
edging weeds from the garden,
replanting what-nots.
lemonstar
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Thu Oct 27, 2011 10:02 am

replanting what-nots
digging up rhubarb I hate
accidentally
The rest of you...keep banging the rocks together.
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Thu Oct 27, 2011 12:18 pm

Accidentally
born with a cord round his neck,
full circle in death.
to be totally honest... whenever you feel you really shouldn't write that, that's exactly what you should write.
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Thu Oct 27, 2011 12:25 pm

Full circle in death,
strangled by the bloodied vine.
Spent tears wash nothing.
Moth
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Thu Oct 27, 2011 2:02 pm

Spent tears wash nothing;
dirty linen at the wake,
remembered always.
to be totally honest... whenever you feel you really shouldn't write that, that's exactly what you should write.
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Fri Oct 28, 2011 6:17 am

remembered always
jagged scar across my cheek
where you once loved me
dedalus
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Sat Oct 29, 2011 5:09 am

where you once loved me
is now a gaping ruin
overgrown with weeds
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over grown with weeds
chain-link fence entraps sand pits
scrambling rodents hide
RichardSanders
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Sat Oct 29, 2011 11:54 am

scrambling rodents hide
for the fury of my hate
closeness remembered
lemonstar
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Sat Oct 29, 2011 6:59 pm

closeness remembered
scent of your winter woolies
put away forever
The rest of you...keep banging the rocks together.
Moth
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Sun Oct 30, 2011 1:31 am

put away forever
silky bras and negligees,
man-made woman's wear.
to be totally honest... whenever you feel you really shouldn't write that, that's exactly what you should write.
lemonstar
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Mon Oct 31, 2011 12:24 am

Man-made woman's wear
This is a man's, man's, man's world
but it ain't nothing
The rest of you...keep banging the rocks together.
Moth
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Mon Oct 31, 2011 12:50 am

but it ain't nothing,
doubling the negative.
It's simply complex.
to be totally honest... whenever you feel you really shouldn't write that, that's exactly what you should write.
lemonstar
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Tue Nov 01, 2011 12:17 pm

It's simply complex
A fractal is recursive
Now do you get it?
The rest of you...keep banging the rocks together.
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Wed Nov 02, 2011 6:52 am

Now do you get it?
Reason don't come into it --
God save King Charlie!
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