jigsaw

[nar]

Six piece jigsaw
for age forty plus,
corner-free and edgeless,
yet square as its box.

Slide its bits
on carpet or desk,
but please ... not that
self-assembly coffee table.

- Neil

[Antcliff]

Hi Neil
Enjoyed this...nice sound on first stanza and nice emphasis on last line. Enjoyable poem which might be read in many ways.
I read it as partly being about the irritations of middle age. But it is no doubt open to many such interpretations.
Fun.
Best wishes,
Ant

[Deryn]

Hi Neil, I like poems that make you think and give room for interpretation. And the content of which you can maybe relate to your own experience.

I could complete a 6 piece jigsaw but probably not without my glasses ! And I know what you mean about that self-assembly coffee table.

40+, are you speaking from experience Neil ?

Deryn 50+

[RichardSanders]

Much enjoyed.
brought a smile of recognition to my face.
thanks for sharing.

[Arian]

I like s1 a lot, neil. Not sure s2 lives up to its billing, though - seems to end with a bit of a whimper, where I was hoping for a bang. So to speak.

cheers
peter

[nar]

Thanks, all.

Like most of my 'get back into writing' efforts, this was off-cuff quick&dirty soul-spew.

Your comments are unworthy, but much appreciated.

@ Ant: 'many ways' will forever be my curse; when it's written it has only one meaning - perhaps I don't take time to understand my reader. So ... Thank you .

@ Deryn: yes, 41 and contemplating the best MLC for me and family

@ Richard: Thanks for taking the time. I've read your stuff too: I'm not sure we write from the same place, but I'm glad to share comments any time.

@ Peter: Whether I agree or not, it's always good to get your crit. In this case, I do: S1 is better than S2. I'm a lazy writer; thanks for not being a lazy reader.

This isn't worth rewriting, but I hope that it gets me back into writing and sharing on this forum.

Kindest,

- Neil

[NorwichPoet]

Like other posts here - I too love the idea of a poem which makes you think and can be interpreted in number of ways.

Look forward to reading more.

NP

[nar]

Thanks, NP.

If you like obscure and open to multiple interpretations, my back-catalogue is full of such ramblings.

Kindest,

- Neil

[David]

Hey Neil, I kinda like it as it is, although I agree with Peter that the ending is a bit of a let down. Or, to adopt your image, you've finished with too much sky.

I definitely liked it, though. You've got a quirky voice of your own that's very attractive, and it's good to read it again.

Cheers

David

[nar]

Thanks, David.

Quirky suits me just fine, old bean.

The ending's certainly quirky, but seems to be hitting single-fives .

Never mind, it's always good to get crit from the playground monitors.

Warmest,

- Neil