Haiku Train

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Sat Jan 28, 2012 8:24 pm

in the fallow field
bacterial action caused
decay of the flesh
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Mon Jan 30, 2012 11:42 pm

Decay of the flesh
Deep furrows made by maggots
Mini Grand Canyon
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Tue Jan 31, 2012 3:57 pm

Mini-grand can, yon
ivories and ebonies
tinkled by Wonder.
War does not determine who is right - only who is left. (Bertrand Russell)
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Mon Feb 06, 2012 11:18 pm

tinkled by Wonder
tickled by recollection
tackled by regret
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Tue Feb 07, 2012 4:58 pm

Tackled by regret
Pondered poetic poses
Failed fabulously
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Wed Feb 15, 2012 6:42 pm

Failed Fabulously
quarter mile from the homestretch
lost her 'maiden' head.
“God has a brown voice, as soft and full as beer.”
~Anne Sexton~
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Wed Feb 15, 2012 11:16 pm

Lost her -- Maidenhead's
blonde bombshell, Diana Dors;
Value for Money
War does not determine who is right - only who is left. (Bertrand Russell)
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Thu Feb 16, 2012 1:31 pm

Value for the money
Put it where your mouth is sir
or just ante up!
“God has a brown voice, as soft and full as beer.”
~Anne Sexton~
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Fri Feb 17, 2012 8:59 pm

Or just Auntie up
a tree, laughing wildly down!
''Mine's a martini!''
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Sat Feb 25, 2012 4:38 am

"Mine's a Martini!"
Sweet, dry, now quite indifferent,
shaken till unstirred.
to be totally honest... whenever you feel you really shouldn't write that, that's exactly what you should write.
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Mon Feb 27, 2012 10:38 pm

shaken ‘til unstirred
a quakescape without storeys
just sparrows singing
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Wed Feb 29, 2012 2:57 pm

just sparrows singing
incessant joy overhead
babble shallow brook
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Wed Feb 29, 2012 3:49 pm

Babble shallow brook.
Overhead the haiku train
thunders through the night.
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Wed Feb 29, 2012 5:10 pm

thunders through the night
rolling rumble, breaking dawn
puddles on the drive.
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Wed Feb 29, 2012 7:52 pm

'Puddles'? On the drive?
Oh no, not again!' you cried.
But it was too late...
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Wed Feb 29, 2012 8:10 pm

but it was too late
to talk away the issue
and besides: the moon....
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Wed Feb 29, 2012 8:26 pm

And beside the moon
hovered a mighty spacecraft:
the ship of poets!
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Wed Feb 29, 2012 8:55 pm

The ship of poets
with diabolical plan!
Quick! Hide your women!
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Wed Feb 29, 2012 9:21 pm

Quick! Hide your women!
Aliens are voracious
In their appetites!
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Wed Feb 29, 2012 9:26 pm

in their appetites(?? lol)
they included pickled beets
sweet crimson delight.
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Wed Feb 29, 2012 10:16 pm

Sweet crimson delight -
the mere sight vampires excite
On teen tv night!
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Thu Mar 01, 2012 12:19 pm

On teen TV night
while popcorn pops, the show
simply entertains.
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Thu Mar 01, 2012 2:25 pm

'Dimply' entertains!
His bashful smile, fat fingers
dancing on the frets.
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Thu Mar 01, 2012 3:04 pm

Dancing on the frets,
woes and worries of the day
boldly she boogied.
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Thu Mar 01, 2012 3:10 pm

Boldly she boogied
to bugle boy's bad be-bop,
bop diddley bop!
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