Haiku Train

[KevJ]

Exceeds the limit
This starship breaks all records
We'll be home soon

[Jackie]

We'll be home soon, tossed
back Limicolaria
Flammea to her young.

[KevJ]

Flammea to her young
this heroic gastropod
carries her own home

[oranggunung]

carries her own home
in the supermarket cart
it still taxes her

[KevJ]

it still taxes her
takes all her strength of will
not to throw tantrums

[Jackie]

Not to throw tantrums
while battling the giants, Thor
stayed focused on Sif.

[KevJ]

stayed focused on Sif
his golden haired beloved
goddess of the Earth

[oranggunung]

goddess of the earth
Annelida never tires
casting all day long

[KevJ]

casting all day long
but no bite to show for it
where are all the fish

[Jackie]

Where are all the fish
women who met the boats? Wind,
when up, halts the trade.

[KevJ]

When up, halts the trade
of a people trafficker.
Lower than vermin.

[nar]

Lower than vermin --
socioeconomic
nationalisation

[KevJ]

Nationalisation
make healthcare universal
- Aneurin Bevan

[KevJ]

Aneurin Bevan
Founder of the NHS
hero of the left

[Moth]

Hero of the left,
a lone voice now redundant
echoes round the mine.

[KevJ]

Echoes round the mine;
victims of Thatcher's Britain.
The miners long gone.

[Suzanne]

The miners long gone
quarried ore set like gravestones
crumbled memories

[KevJ]

crumbled memories!
but soft lights and sweet music
puts flesh on the bones

[Marc]

Puts flesh on the bones.
Mr Confectioner, please:
give me Toblerone!

[KevJ]

Give me Toblerone?
That triangular chocolate?
No thank you very much!

[Marc]

'No thank you very much'
is in fact six syllables.
Does it matter?

[k-j]

Does it matter
how many syllables a
haiku has in it?
No. Nor the number of lines.

[Marc]

I beg to differ.
There are schools of different thought.
Are 'ons' syllables?
If you have more than three lines
does it become a 'Tanka'?

[Jackie]

Does it become a
tanka or a lorry in
your dreams, this small Ford?

[KevJ]

'No thank you very much'
is in fact six syllables.
Does it matter?

Hi Marc
I was counting one syllable for each word making five. Is that wrong?

Anyway the Haiku train as I see it is just a bit of fun
And there hasn't been a genuine haiku written here for some time I think