Haiku Train

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Mon Jun 02, 2014 10:59 am

But my direction
varies. Sometimes I go five
then seven then five.
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Mon Jun 02, 2014 2:41 pm

then seven then five,
rapidly to three, two, one:
- and Haiku is fun!
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Tue Jun 03, 2014 6:57 am

… and haiku is fun;
take your imagination
on a brief sojourn.
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Tue Jun 03, 2014 10:19 am

On a brief sojourn:
Haiku and Tai Chi. Repulse
the rhyming monkey
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Tue Jun 03, 2014 2:49 pm

The rhyming monkey,
an ex banana junkie,
still feeling funky.
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Fri Jun 06, 2014 5:47 pm

Still feeling funky
with no monkey on my back
while the sun shines
I am not a number ... I am a FREE man!
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Thu Jul 17, 2014 8:32 am

While the calm sun shines,
foaming stallions agitate
my shore of stillness.
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Thu Jul 17, 2014 8:44 am

my shore of stillness
your current uncertainty
our desert island
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Thu Jul 17, 2014 5:00 pm

Our desert island:
pillow buoys, snacks in bed,
we drift on white sheets.
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Thu Jul 17, 2014 6:34 pm

We drift on white sheets
We, oblivious, to the
Rising of the Moon
I am not a number ... I am a FREE man!
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Fri Jul 18, 2014 6:05 am

Rising of the moon.

A companion of the night

in a million rooms.
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Fri Jul 18, 2014 7:52 am

In a million rooms

whisperings of love grow cold

beneath unmade beds.
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Beneath unmade beds
lair of spiders who wait
to be trodden on
I am not a number ... I am a FREE man!
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Sat Jul 19, 2014 11:55 am

To be trodden on
Or to get out of harm's way?
Prudence paused to think.
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Sat Jul 19, 2014 2:12 pm

Prudence paused to think
Ain't got no bounce in my shoes,
I ain't got nothing
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Sat Jul 19, 2014 2:37 pm

I ain't got nothing,
no love on the horizon
no chained rabbit's foot.
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Sat Jul 19, 2014 3:12 pm

No chained rabbits foot
I spent the summer in shock.
Nice day for a walk.
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Sat Jul 19, 2014 3:21 pm

Nice day for a walk.
I was ill for most of it.
What am I doing?
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Sat Jul 19, 2014 5:11 pm

What am I doing?
Untucked shirt, hands on your waist,
new moon rising slow.
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Sat Jul 19, 2014 5:18 pm

new moon rising slow
shredded on the lake surface
your eyes glistening
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Sat Jul 19, 2014 5:37 pm

Your eyes glistening
flakes of snow in the sunlight.
Freedom to travel.
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Sat Jul 19, 2014 7:42 pm

freedom to travel
living out of suitcases
adventures savoured
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Sun Jul 20, 2014 7:11 am

Adventures savoured.

Spirit of experience

tequila flavoured
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Sun Jul 20, 2014 8:06 am

Tequila flavored
salt kiss savored, bitter lime
lover's summertime.
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Sun Jul 20, 2014 8:24 am

Lover's summertime

at the top of my mountain.

Climb at your own risk.
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