woman work the water

[private_grave]

When winter petal walks
some say "sweet spring!"
Under gentle rain and gorgeous misty moon
a girl is aching like a luscious bruise, drained of all beauty.

When the evening is dry and raw,
she shakes, then falls, a sad women
with a white wet bouquet of skin,
parting like delicate lace.

[cameron]

Hi pg

Welcome aboard.

This is rather fine and should really be posted in "experienced". It reads like a translation of Japanese/Chinese poetry: sparse, zen-like, haunting.

Nice one.

Look forward to seeing more of your stuff.

Cheers
Cam

[Minstrel]

Agreed

A day in the life/ death of a petal. Very light.

Minstrel

[mick]

Yes, thanks for this PG.
Nice one.
Mick

[benjywenjy]

really haunting and beautifull

'luscious bruise' - what an amazing image

loved it lots

benjy

[anniecat]

Hi, absolutly beautiful, short yet so full, very sad but also true . AC