Berry Season

[Antcliff]

Bilberries
good,
but not as good as
beerberries

Beerberries
good,
but not as good as
ice cream berries

Ice cream berries
good,
but not as good as
kiss-me berries

[JJWilliamson]

Kiss-me berries
good,
but not as good as
huckleberries.

Is that the general thrust?

enjoyed

JJ

[Antcliff]

Kiss-me berries
good,
but not as good as
huckleberries.

Is that the general thrust?

enjoyed

JJ

Huckleberries are things o'beauty


Seth

[ray miller]

Nobody's gonna wanna kiss you after beer and ice cream. I looked up beerberries, in my stupidity, it's the name of an Irish band. The Pogues they ain't.

[Antcliff]

Nobody's gonna wanna kiss you after beer and ice cream. I looked up beerberries, in my stupidity, it's the name of an Irish band. The Pogues they ain't.

Well, I can report that it sometimes works. (Sometimes not). Tends to be pale ale though.

Okay, gonna You Tube this band. I am not a huge fan of the Pogues, so sub-Pogue may be..

Seth

[PaulSteveLaurence]

"bearberries" are wheat berries. Love the folk like refrain with "not as good as". This makes it almost a fertility poem for summer. Enjoyed.

[Antcliff]

Thanks, Paul

A substantially different version just came out....

[k-j]

The extra stanza in the print version makes all the difference - why didn't you include it here, Seth?

[Antcliff]

The extra stanza in the print version makes all the difference - why didn't you include it here, Seth?

Thanks, K-J. Glad to hear so. Because it wasn't written at the time. I had an initial idea fragment and posted here. A few days after I remembered a looming deadline and decided to try and make something...more...of at least part of the initial fragment. A bit of a last-minute-charlie on this one.

Seth

[k-j]

So it's reached the stage where you publish in print first, and only then consider submitting to PG!

[PaulSteveLaurence]

Bilberries
good,
but not as good as
beerberries

Beerberries
good,
but not as good as
ice cream berries

Ice cream berries
good,
but not as good as
kiss-me berries

Print version is more witty.

[Arian]

The extra stanza in the print version makes all the difference

Completely agree. I was noncommittal for a few readings, then I read the thread and found the last verse. And the piece went from being so-so in my mind, to outstanding. Really like it. Suddenly, from seeming a bit unanchored, there was a witty, and reflective, resolution.

I am not a huge fan of the Pogues

I can understand that, but they had their moments. Recommend their version of Waltzing Matilda. Moving.

Good stuff, seth.
Cheers
peter

[Jackie]

It's the title in the print version that I like.

Jackie

[Antcliff]

Thanks, Paul!

Thanks, Jackie

Nice to hear...yes, it will be the title now.

Thank you, Peter. Very nice to hear this about the re-write. I was lucky in that a later deadline forced me to go back...and write about what the poem was really about in the first place.

Recommend their version of Waltzing Matilda. Moving.

I now have. It is, yes. Thanks.

Seth