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Sat Jul 29, 2006 12:31 pm

It deosn't mattr,
if enything is speled write
al mackes perfict sence.
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Sat Jul 29, 2006 12:42 pm

al mackes perfict sence?
mackerels perfect science -
must be the fish oil.
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Sat Jul 29, 2006 6:30 pm

must be the fish oil -
lubricates its joints and pipes.
Well-oiled halibut
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Sat Jul 29, 2006 6:40 pm

well oiled halibut
swashes the waves, the big rigs
capsize, swallow him
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Sat Jul 29, 2006 6:45 pm

capsize, swallow him -
swiftly to the house, Martin.
Have we done this once?
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Sat Jul 29, 2006 6:56 pm

Have we done this once?
Ask me anything at all
except damn questions!
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Sat Jul 29, 2006 7:15 pm

accept damn questions!
deny damn answers that don't
answer damn questions!
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Sat Jul 29, 2006 7:16 pm

except damn questions!
Accept all the answers though -
could come in handy.
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Sat Jul 29, 2006 7:27 pm

Could come in handy
that aluminium leg;
it fits like a glove.
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Sun Jul 30, 2006 9:48 am

"It fits like a glove."
said the dirty ore,
babbling bauxite.
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The babbling bauxite
rolling in the furnaces
melting to silver
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Sun Jul 30, 2006 5:19 pm

melting to silver -
Smiths' insolvent sixpences -
defacing the king.
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Defacing the king -
They did that to Charles Stuart,
and really made sure!
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And really made sure,
there was no public disorder,
buried in Winsdor.
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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buried in Winsdor
then re-buried in Windsor.
Ah, the ups and downs.
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Mon Jul 31, 2006 3:58 pm

"Ah, the ups and downs.",
said the seesaw, plaintively,
"Reciprocation."
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"Reciprocation
be damned!" said Logarithm,
"Look at Calculus."
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Reciprocation,
you scratch my back, I'll scratch yours...
Itchfunctional pledge.
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Mon Jul 31, 2006 4:24 pm

Itchfunctional pledge.
Loofah gloves coming right up!
Polish to a shine.
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Mon Jul 31, 2006 4:34 pm

Polish to a shine -
You can see your face in it.
There's always a catch!
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Mon Jul 31, 2006 5:25 pm

There's always a catch!
Somewhere between the shoulder
blades usually
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Mon Jul 31, 2006 5:33 pm

blades usually
cut a very fine line or
a very fine lawn
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Mon Jul 31, 2006 5:45 pm

a very fine lawn
and a pond with frog spawn - no
dog shit and bin bags.
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Mon Jul 31, 2006 6:10 pm

dog shit and bin bags,
all part of the urban sprawl,
greenbelts, parks and all.
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Mon Jul 31, 2006 6:25 pm

Greenbelts parks and all
aren't the inner city where
you need a black belt
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