Promise

[1lankest]

We sow wildflower seeds
there will be meadow
providing rain

[Macavity]

hi Luke,
Never had much success with wildflower seeds - well, zero success actually. Goodluck on that Sowing/planting does promise,
and that optimism is like a rain on despondency. We had a classic Welsh downpour last night!

cheers
mac

[TrevorConway]

Hey Luke, I wonder if twisting the phrasing a bit might make for something a bit more interesting (I just found the phrasing a bit bland for such a short piece). Example below, anyway. Hope it's of some help.

To sow wildflower seeds
is to believe there will be meadow
providing rain.


All the best,

T

[capricorn]

We sow wildflower seeds
there will be meadow
providing rain

Hi, I've read this a few times and each time it almost sounds like the meadow is providing rain, not the rain is nurturing the meadow. (might just be me). Perhaps if the last line were
providing it rains.

a suggestion

We sow wildflower seeds
anticipate a meadow
providing it rains

Eira

[1lankest]

Hmmm thanks guys. Pretty vacuous this one. A reminder never to drink and post.
And Mac, I too am in Wales, in the rain!

Luke

[Poet]

We sow wildflower seeds
there will be meadow
providing rain

This reminds of one of William Carlos Williams poems (I think it is called The Wheelbarrow) anyway you forgot periods in your poem, I like the directness of the piece. Thanks for sharing.

[JJWilliamson]

Hi Luke

The sowing of wildflower seeds is a stark reminder for me. I'd sow them, only to pull them up later in the year, thinking they were weeds. Then I'd remember.

A pleasant little haiku that could stand a nudge here and there. It's definitely worth pursuing, though.

Enjoyed

Best

JJ

We sow wildflower seeds
there will be meadow
providing rain