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Sat Nov 21, 2020 1:09 am

wakes a sleepy mole
yawning, stretching, life from snow
impact winter over
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Impact winter over
sleigh bells thaw
reindeer stir
Long time a child and still a child
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reindeer stir
horse flies bite in passions heat
an arctic frenzy
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an arctic frenzy
across the tundra a bear
pisses with vigour
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Wed Nov 25, 2020 9:49 am

Now that's a haiku, mac. Nice one.

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Impact winter over:
Impact summer uncertain:
Future nebulous.
"And I meet full face on dark mornings
The bestial visor, bent in
By the blows of what happened to happen."

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Future nebulous;
Past unthinkable; present
Locked down but OK.
"And I meet full face on dark mornings
The bestial visor, bent in
By the blows of what happened to happen."

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Locked down but OK
when curious sunbirds gift me
iridescent blue.
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Iridescent blue
glints off pre-dawn snow and a
wintergreen pokes through.
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air become solid
wintergreen pokes through ice
hope beyond science.
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hope beyond science
has been calculated at
seventeen. Approx.
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Seventeen, approx;
Canada geese
landing in the duck pond
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landing in the duck pond
cannonball summer
a rain of laughter
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A rain of laughter;
Pouring through grimy streets
What ridiculousness.
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What ridiculousness:
a riot of crows
murdering at sunset
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murdering at sunset
peak time for carnal desire
savour stolen flesh
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savour stolen flesh
and taste the folly frolic
knit jumpers instead
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knit jumpers instead
traditions intertwining
all links in the chain
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all links in the chain
acquaintances and lovers
river to the sea
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river to the sea
was terribly cliche of me
I must do better
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I must do better
punctuation. The contours shift
in sand. It will rain.
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In sand, it will rain
drowning tiny worlds to death
forming crystal suns.
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Forming crystal suns
to occupy space. Give ink
in minds to scroll light.
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in minds to scroll light
people are but the product
the scroll all we know
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The scroll all we know
encrypted with shoaling script
redacted by time.
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