Eclipse
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Inspired by my misinterpretation of a fine poem by Mr Moose.
A hidden evening, cloaked by motionless trees,
a frailty to their lank demure, lost in their silent
leaves. Huddled we sit, your odd gloves, making
light of the anticipation, we share a flask for the
first time, bonding over steaming tea and a rustling
in the bracken. I take your hand, you smile, trust is
a simple touch and the stillness of the night crackles.
I lead you to the waters edge, coots smack wings
against a tremulous air, squawk our arrival, then glide
into submission, gabbling, yakking themselves into
silence. Lost in the complex rituals of seeking a mate,
at our frightened faces, alive in the lake, we forget the
light as it quickly pales and our burdens are halved
as the moon is eclipsed and our reflections fade;
just you and me, and this beautiful calm.
A hidden evening, cloaked by motionless trees,
a frailty to their lank demure, lost in their silent
leaves. Huddled we sit, your odd gloves, making
light of the anticipation, we share a flask for the
first time, bonding over steaming tea and a rustling
in the bracken. I take your hand, you smile, trust is
a simple touch and the stillness of the night crackles.
I lead you to the waters edge, coots smack wings
against a tremulous air, squawk our arrival, then glide
into submission, gabbling, yakking themselves into
silence. Lost in the complex rituals of seeking a mate,
at our frightened faces, alive in the lake, we forget the
light as it quickly pales and our burdens are halved
as the moon is eclipsed and our reflections fade;
just you and me, and this beautiful calm.
Last edited by camus on Wed Feb 02, 2005 7:02 am, edited 4 times in total.
hi Camus really is a good poem some great thoughtfull lines my favourite being......... a simple touch and the stillness of the night crackles.
I lead you to the waters edge..............
great line...good poem Tom....
I lead you to the waters edge..............
great line...good poem Tom....
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I'm not the greatest fan of modern poetic forms, but this poem could change my way of thinking...well done Camus, an excellent effort.
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SEAN KINSELLA
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SEAN KINSELLA
Bumpetty bump. Excellent couplets.
"trust is a simple touch and the stillness of the night crackles."
Sweet.
Cheers
Stu
"trust is a simple touch and the stillness of the night crackles."
Sweet.
Cheers
Stu