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courage from crocus
beyond cold loves equity
past springs shoots promise
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past springs shoots promise
roots delve the worm tickling earth
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bulbs chuckle awake
fields be in gusty gaffaws
funny farm's calling
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funny farm's calling
Determined Deafness is best
listen to nature
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listen to nature
a sound to knock you sideways
lie still beneath Frīg
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lie still beneath Frīg
low cloud spun from the distaff
prophecy's white web
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prophecy's white web
Frigg has you pinned and entranced
Ovipositor.
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ovipositor
thrumming within nature's grip
continuation
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Continuation
the imperative life verb
sacred unbeing
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sacred unbeing
a shell of waves at the ear
tidal memory
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Tidal memory
an ebb and flow of present
and past and present
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and past and present
future ever-elusive
ever-affected
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Ever-affected
a display like flowers scent
never petrichor
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never petrichor
though the perfumer seeks it
bottled earthen rain
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bottled earthern rain
he pours into his gran's glass
tastes of peat, of home
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tastes of peat, of home
never taste again
buried with her now
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buried with her now
nine herbs and the wild rose
safe sleep of the sweet
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safe sleep of the sweet
humbugs stashed in my sock drawer
fuzzy midnight feast
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fuzzy midnight feast
across my neighbour's nice lawn
a full moon last night
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a full moon last night
I gobbled up the neighbours
a werewolf's lament
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a werewolf's lament
dawn slams out there on the heath
a door on the dark
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Hi Lia,

I like this one a lot:

a full moon last night
I gobbled up the neighbours
a werewolf's lament

Cheers,
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Thanks, John. You're very welcome to join in if you want to. You just take the last line of the previous haiku and use it as your first line. You can stay on topic or take a new path with it.

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a door on the dark
flags unfurled and torches lit
our Queen's jubilee
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our Queen's jubilee
pints and pop, pork pies and quiche
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