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Thu Aug 10, 2006 5:59 pm

Inflatable doors
kept blowing up, letting in
door to door salesmen.
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Door to door salesmen,
like wall to wall carpets must
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Be rolled and laid flat,
like Aladdin's magic mat.
Fly me to the moon.
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Fly me to the moon
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Bars with Moonrock Buzz -
A comprehensive guide to
lunar hostelries.
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"Lunar Hostelries"
- the new HitchHiker's Guide by
Mary Humorum
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Mary Humorum,
a lunar phenomenon,
now eclipsed and gone.
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"Now eclipsed and gone"
said the Gibbon, upon which
he declined and fell
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He declined and fell
upon the gibbous moon that
shone on Rome's conquests.
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Shone on Rome's conquests
the light showed a stack of shields -
Flat Pax Pomana
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Flat Pax Pomana?
Dark Age's Pax Britannia,
the time of Arthur.
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The time of Arthur,
when knights were bold and people
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Did as they were told?
But out of sight out of mind,
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Is nearer the truth
any less a lie? We read
twisted history.
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Twisted history,
twisted present and future.
Can you believe it!


Twisted history, has a nice ring to it. You should put that to good use in a poem, Mick.
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Can you believe it?
We had the very same thought.
Synchronicity.
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Synchroni City?
I've seen Manchester City -
Prefer United.
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Prefer United
States, Mister Blair? The cost is
half a billion.


today
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Half a billion
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Just lend us a quid
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A guinea pig face
on top of a yak physique:
my secretary.
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My secretary,
Elkie Brooks, has a brother
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Who babbles bullshit
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Presidential ones.
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Presidential ones?
Or President Juan Juan of
RubiKa Cuba
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Rubika Cuba;
easily turned after a
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