Lily of Valleys

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thatboweryman
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Mon Aug 07, 2006 12:25 pm

Lily of the Valleys

Delight is ever wandering within,
Constantly tracing, forever pacing,
The paths of sorrow amid crowded woods.
If I were lost, or within whim immersed
Delight I would entrust with my salvage.

With poise in mind, as though a traveler
In merriment, with phantom step I went.
Until green pastures slowly disappeared
Then I in memory recall a sound;
A mountain groaned, the valleys echoed
And all with blossom grew impatiently

With humble gaze though on a jewel fixed
I stood, and all in colour bloomed graceful.
The rose, however cited she may be,
In deep red accent, would her praise be known.
Without her gown of thorns, at liberty,
Her strides unfettered from those in critique,
May she in such a bower populate.
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Mon Aug 07, 2006 12:44 pm

Welcome to Poet's Graves.

Just to remind you to read the rules - The requirements of the site are that you do at least two crits per poem posted. The more crits you do, the more you are likely to receive in return.

cheers

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Thu Aug 17, 2006 3:52 pm

i really liked that poem and i could just imagine it.
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Fri Aug 18, 2006 5:10 pm

It was an excellent poem, very visual. Keep writing! :wink:
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Sat Aug 19, 2006 6:18 pm

Hi and welcome
Yes I like this poem clear imagery a good start to this forum.
Thank you for sharing.
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Mon Sep 04, 2006 12:07 am

Thanks very much for all the interest in this piece.
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Mon Sep 04, 2006 12:19 am

I also enjoyed this.
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Thu Sep 14, 2006 2:55 pm

I greatly enjoyed reading your poem. Keep writing! :)
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Thu Sep 14, 2006 3:13 pm

really good :) really enjoyed reading it
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Thu Mar 05, 2009 1:17 pm

Like of old this one. A new reincarnation is born but where are u now?
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Thu Mar 05, 2009 4:14 pm

Nice read, very visual and some fantasic lines.

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