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Thu Aug 31, 2006 6:25 pm

'Previous haiku'
could be one that's still to come.
Which way time's arrow?
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Thu Aug 31, 2006 8:02 pm

Which way time's arrow?
Which wood would you use if the
brewer let you choose.
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Fri Sep 01, 2006 12:44 am

Brewer let you choose?
Do you mean Bill Brewer from
Uncle Tom Cobbly?
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Fri Sep 01, 2006 1:58 am

The Communist Haiku

Uncle Tom Cobbly
displaced Uncle Sam - just wait
for Uncle Karl!
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Fri Sep 01, 2006 2:42 am

For Uncle Karl Marx
a smouldering samovar
could light up the night.
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Fri Sep 01, 2006 9:40 am

Could light up the night,
but couldn't light up the day.
Blue moon, you left me.
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Fri Sep 01, 2006 4:40 pm

Blue moon, you left me
rubbing my eyes, these Es are
quite a surprise, you..
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Fri Sep 01, 2006 5:10 pm

Quite a surprise you
leaving a crappy first line.
Is it hell as like.
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Fri Sep 01, 2006 5:40 pm

is it hell as like
war is hell on a human
scale, we weigh our souls
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Fri Sep 01, 2006 5:52 pm

Scale - we weigh our souls.
Scale - balance them well against
the Feather of Truth.
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Fri Sep 01, 2006 5:54 pm

Scale, we weigh our souls
in kill-o-grams whilst watching
tons of victims rise

Buggarbumbitchbastardbollocks
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Fri Sep 01, 2006 6:04 pm

Tons of victims rise,
hope Mick won't butt in this time -
Getting out of sync.
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Fri Sep 01, 2006 10:51 pm

getting out of sync,
Justin Timberlake master
bates- hook, line, singer
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Fri Sep 01, 2006 10:57 pm

Bates hook, line, singer,
catches big fat, scaly bass,
just in Timbuctoo.
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Sat Sep 02, 2006 8:19 am

Justin Timbuctoo,
at the Waterloo crossroads,
went down on his knees
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Sat Sep 02, 2006 10:09 am

Went down on his knees,
begged for mercy. The king said
"Get up, you big tart!"
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Sat Sep 02, 2006 10:44 am

Get up, you big tart!
It's so damn rude to lie and
fart in solitude.
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Sat Sep 02, 2006 11:17 am

"Fart in solitude"
Wandered silent as a fart
that breaks so lonely.
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Sat Sep 02, 2006 11:28 am

That break's so lonely,
and awkward to follow from.
Your retribution?
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Sat Sep 02, 2006 11:40 am

Your retribution?
My retribution - I'll take
a contribution!
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Sat Sep 02, 2006 2:38 pm

A contribution
in confucian form might say
"Man with hole in pale..."
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Sat Sep 02, 2006 3:03 pm

Man with hole in pale
cannot hope to spell bucket.
Paleface speak fork-tongued.
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Sun Sep 03, 2006 12:21 am

Paleface speak fork-tongued.
Dark face speak unernlightened.
What are we to do?
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Sun Sep 03, 2006 1:03 am

What are we to do,
with tripping, quipping forked tongues?
Issss reptilianspeak.
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Sun Sep 03, 2006 2:26 am

isssst reptilianspeak
and we wantssss it, yesss we do
my preciousssss haiku
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