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My preciousssss haiku;
How many s's in Psssssssssued?
Should I say, Ggggollum?
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Sun Sep 03, 2006 3:08 am

Should I say Gggollum?
No! Don't antagonize those
bad voice gurgling hacks
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Bad voice gurgling hacks,
slander against hobbits!--
JR Tolkien curse!
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Sun Sep 03, 2006 9:58 am

JR Tolkien curse!
The Desolation of Smaug
amongst other things
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Sun Sep 03, 2006 10:55 am

Amongst other things,
I find mostly other things.
Different sameness.
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Sun Sep 03, 2006 12:39 pm

Different sameness
to differentiate from
the same difference
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Sun Sep 03, 2006 12:45 pm

The same difference
is a double-headed coin.
Party politics.
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Sun Sep 03, 2006 2:16 pm

Party politics;
who gets to pop the balloons,
-- blow out the candles?
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Sun Sep 03, 2006 2:23 pm

Blow out the candles
along with the middle east -
use oil lamps instead.
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Use oil lamps instead
of abusing them - rubbing
for the djinn within.
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For the djinn within
to be without gin is a
spiritual loss.
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spiritual loss,
pink cloud candy floss - green moss
is much earthier.
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Sun Sep 03, 2006 3:07 pm

is much earthier
than all those saints, clothed in light,
I'll tell you that much...
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I'll tell you that much
wants more - the greedy feed from
the needy poeple
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the needy poeple
need people to teach them to spell.
Lexdysia rules!
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Lexdysia rules
the roast and casts spills on the
slippery splash-backs
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Slippery splash-backs,
make fish frying dangerous,
more so for haddock.
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More so for haddock,
snagged on another fishy
line in the North Sea
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line in the North Sea
curve in the South Sea, nothing
to the East and West
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To the east and west
I travel in a circle
What am I? answer?
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What am I? answer?
I am neither sun nor moon
Hurricane's my name
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"Hurricane's my name."
That's very surprising, I
thought it was Clouseau.
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Thought it was Clouseau.
Wait, on second thought... Cousteau,
something seems fishy..
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Something seems fishy
the other side of the boat;
cast your nets in there!
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cast your nets in there!
no more fishing with hooks which
snag on people's nose
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