Here Hare Here

[camus]

As I walked out one autumnal morning
frost clenching the frigid ground
I heard the fracture of nature, of things
breaking and closing down.

Beyond the distant hedgerow, gaussian blurred
by the pink sunlight, I caught for a brief
moment (perhaps in my minds-eye)
something alert, erect, then gone, like a thief.

[jisbell00]

Hi Kris,

I like it. I might write autumn, not autumnal, but htat could be personal preference.
Interesting to compare this with Leopardi's hedgerow poem, L'infinito. I posted it here a week or so ago!

Cheers,
John

[ray miller]

I've got the Dylan song in my head now,
As I walked out one morning
to breathe the air around Tom Paine

Just "autumn" is better rhythmically, I think. I like the frost/frigid/fracture. Good ending, good poem. Gaussian, though, are you having a laugh. I looked it up and I'm still none the wiser.

[ton321]

"the fracture of nature", sticks,

but Gaussian is a bit Meta, unless you know what Gaussian is...

Tony

[Macavity]

As I walked out one autumnal morning
frost clenching the frigid ground
I heard the fracture of nature, of things
breaking and closing down.

Beyond the distant hedgerow, gaussian blurred
by the pink sunlight, I caught for a brief
moment (perhaps in my minds-eye)
something alert, erect, then gone, like a thief.

Enjoyed Kris. Echo of Laurie Lee in L1?

[jisbell00]

Nice title btw.

CHeers,
John

[Ryder]

Nice, evocative of Ted Hughes with only a sense of the animal being near and with stark awareness.

I also hear rhyme where there actually isn't any which sometimes happens with a good poem.

My only nit would be that it's too short which could be a compliment.

[camus]

Thanks all.

I'm rather fond of 'autumnal' it must stay.

gaussian blurred

Point taken. It's a photoshop blur filter, that I actually presumed had seeped into reality, obviously not!

I've got the Dylan song in my head now

Nay Mr Wilkes, I didn't 'borrow' it from Dylan.

Echo of Laurie Lee in L1?

For sure. Which in turn Dylan must have 'borrowed.' Recycling!

with only a sense of the animal being near and with stark awareness.

Exactly what I was going for. Glad that came across. It's great when intentions are remarked upon, makes it all worth while.

Cheers
Kris