Haiku Train

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Sun Oct 01, 2006 3:21 pm

And can the nose tell
the mouth what it is smelling,
when it has no tongue?
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Sun Oct 01, 2006 3:37 pm

When it has no tongue,
mouth is useless in China,
because Fu Men Chu.
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Sun Oct 01, 2006 4:46 pm

because Fu Men Chu
the ends of their moustaches
they cough up hair balls.
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Sun Oct 01, 2006 4:53 pm

They cough up hair-balls,
which all get together and
form a Government!
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form a government
disdain laws like a lion
or a nihilist
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or a nihilist
will cuss at you, and then wish
he had reasons to
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He had reasons to
regret all the things he'd done.
Death threats for a start.
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Mon Oct 02, 2006 1:24 am

Death threats for a start -
“Why don’t we just abort it?”
Maybe, maybe not!
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"And I'm lost, and I'm lost
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
I'm handcuffed to the bishop and the barbershop liar
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
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Mon Oct 02, 2006 2:11 am

Maybe, maybe not!
Maybe just euthanasia.
What a way to end.


a snob just informed me that we have been writing senyru, not haiku, for this entire train.
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Mon Oct 02, 2006 5:48 am

What a way to end.
Don't understand Japanese -
Start a sonnet train.


http://members.tripod.com/~Startag/HkSenDiff.html
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Mon Oct 02, 2006 8:09 am

Start a sonnet train.
No kigo to worry ‘bout . . .
but fourteen lines. (Shit!)
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"And I'm lost, and I'm lost
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
I'm handcuffed to the bishop and the barbershop liar
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
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[Tom]
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Mon Oct 02, 2006 9:34 am

But fourteen lines. (Shit!)
Iambic pentameter -
(shit and corruption!)
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Mon Oct 02, 2006 10:40 am

Shit and corruption -
politics in a nutshell;
pick your own Party!
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Mon Oct 02, 2006 11:16 am

pick your own Party
similar to picking scabs
but these never heal
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"And I'm lost, and I'm lost
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
I'm handcuffed to the bishop and the barbershop liar
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
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[Tom]
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Mon Oct 02, 2006 11:27 am

But these never heal
unless left out in the sun,
not just covered up.
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Mon Oct 02, 2006 11:49 am

“Not just covered up”
was the name of her novel
about politics
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"And I'm lost, and I'm lost
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
I'm handcuffed to the bishop and the barbershop liar
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
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[Tom]
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Mon Oct 02, 2006 12:02 pm

About politics -
Maintaining the status quo
with any Party.
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Mon Oct 02, 2006 2:50 pm

With any Party
the Annual Conference
stinks of effluent
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Mon Oct 02, 2006 2:51 pm

stinks of effluent
and ammonia doesn't
that make mustard gas?
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Mon Oct 02, 2006 3:00 pm

That make mustard gas,
this make plenty phosgene gas
now me run like wind.
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Mon Oct 02, 2006 4:54 pm

now me run like wind,
leave many cowboy standing,
with mud on pale face
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Mon Oct 02, 2006 4:57 pm

with mud on pale face
and water in the bucket -
a bright idea!
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Mon Oct 02, 2006 5:49 pm

A bright idea!
Recycle your light bulbs as
glass candle holders
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Mon Oct 02, 2006 5:55 pm

glass candle holders
shouldn't be people or throw
stones in wax houses.
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Mon Oct 02, 2006 6:10 pm

Stones in wax houses
gather no rolling bees or
birds' hands in bushes
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