I see you’ve got arms
just like me,
one on each side.
Very good.
Perhaps you can offer me
some sort of scheme.
Something to pull my head
out the sand.
Girls
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Gidday Thoke
interesting imagery. I like the attention on the arms, especially when one is feeling insecure. Here you get the image of being dragged into reality by strong arms or held tenderly for consolation. "Very good!"
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Dave
interesting imagery. I like the attention on the arms, especially when one is feeling insecure. Here you get the image of being dragged into reality by strong arms or held tenderly for consolation. "Very good!"
Cheers
Dave
Cheers
Dave
"And I'm lost, and I'm lost
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
I'm handcuffed to the bishop and the barbershop liar
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
" [Tom]
Dave
"And I'm lost, and I'm lost
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
I'm handcuffed to the bishop and the barbershop liar
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
" [Tom]
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I love how you mirror yourself to your female subject (I hope), as if she commits to your standards.Tthe use of 'very good' makes me think of a higher male figure, maybe a teacher, or a father or even someone with a military persona. This is a very interesting piece, I would like to see a longer version just to see where it could go however the shortness is quite sweet.
"I see you’ve got arms
just like me,
one on each side."
At First Sight
Although these verses tell you are equal, the last verse of the first stanza puts you up into a higher step. However, the beginning of the second stanza makes the other a little bit higher from the previous position as an offer (esp. if it is asked) is usually given by an equivalent at least even if the demanded subject matter is somehow immoral. That means the other is higher than you in that (immoral) way. Anyway...
With the image of an ostrich, I guess you're underlining the body and hiding the mind which seemed kinda feministic ( I hope) to me and which I liked.
So, the other is the mind and you are the body?
After The Title
Regarding the title, if the other is female too, then these lines just seem as a contest between the homo-genders.
Cheers,
ADOUR
just like me,
one on each side."
At First Sight
Although these verses tell you are equal, the last verse of the first stanza puts you up into a higher step. However, the beginning of the second stanza makes the other a little bit higher from the previous position as an offer (esp. if it is asked) is usually given by an equivalent at least even if the demanded subject matter is somehow immoral. That means the other is higher than you in that (immoral) way. Anyway...
With the image of an ostrich, I guess you're underlining the body and hiding the mind which seemed kinda feministic ( I hope) to me and which I liked.
So, the other is the mind and you are the body?
After The Title
Regarding the title, if the other is female too, then these lines just seem as a contest between the homo-genders.
Cheers,
ADOUR
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I'm confused.
The poem is best summarized by some lines from a Bob Dylan song. Well, not summarised exactly, since these lines are as long as the poem:
Well, I've been lookin' all over
For a gal like you,
I can't find nobody
So you'll have to do.
Just-a one kind favor I ask you,
'Low me just-a one more chance.
Also, I read that ostriches don't actually bury their heads in the sand. Only humans do it!
The poem is best summarized by some lines from a Bob Dylan song. Well, not summarised exactly, since these lines are as long as the poem:
Well, I've been lookin' all over
For a gal like you,
I can't find nobody
So you'll have to do.
Just-a one kind favor I ask you,
'Low me just-a one more chance.
Also, I read that ostriches don't actually bury their heads in the sand. Only humans do it!
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Gidday
Enjoy the confusion, guys. Everyone has an interpretation. If you make it abstract enough the interpretations are endless.
Neil Young has a song called "Powderfinger". It seems pretty straight forward until you start reading the thousands of interpretations put on it by fans. Sometimes our words trigger a memory, a taste, a sound, a smell in others. Explaining an idea may sometimes disappoint a reader who has had a whole new experience evoked.
Cheers
Dave
Enjoy the confusion, guys. Everyone has an interpretation. If you make it abstract enough the interpretations are endless.
Neil Young has a song called "Powderfinger". It seems pretty straight forward until you start reading the thousands of interpretations put on it by fans. Sometimes our words trigger a memory, a taste, a sound, a smell in others. Explaining an idea may sometimes disappoint a reader who has had a whole new experience evoked.
Cheers
Dave
Cheers
Dave
"And I'm lost, and I'm lost
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
I'm handcuffed to the bishop and the barbershop liar
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
" [Tom]
Dave
"And I'm lost, and I'm lost
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
I'm handcuffed to the bishop and the barbershop liar
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
" [Tom]
Really liked it too thoke, not gonna try and analise it too deeply, tho my interpretation was that the first person was the submsissive of the two looking for guidance....
"a scheme" to wake up to reality....
makes me think of my relationship with my partner...
liked it
"a scheme" to wake up to reality....
makes me think of my relationship with my partner...
liked it
Such things of great potential
Beauty love innate, so true
To look within thyself
To realise, I am, As you
Beauty love innate, so true
To look within thyself
To realise, I am, As you
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Yeah, that's pretty much it. Glad you liked it.greybald wrote:my interpretation was that the first person was the submsissive of the two looking for guidance....
"a scheme" to wake up to reality....