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Mon Mar 26, 2007 11:21 am

Vicariously,
The Bumblebees live through the
dewy Magnolias.
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Tue Mar 27, 2007 8:44 am

dewey Magnolias -
Huwey bought them for his girl;
Lewey was jealous
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Tue Mar 27, 2007 9:05 am

Lewey was jealous
Of Lulu who was in Looe
Loving the lithe light.
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Tue Mar 27, 2007 9:32 am

Loving the lithe light,
languid, flitting, lightning-quick
lepidoptera.
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Tue Mar 27, 2007 9:42 am

Lepidoptera
Opt for the singeing terror
Of the candle flame.
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Tue Mar 27, 2007 10:56 am

Of the candle flame
the mystic's inner voice spoke
and waxed lyrical
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Tue Mar 27, 2007 12:32 pm

...and waxed lyrical,
leaving smooth, shiny writing
between clumps of hair.
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"And I'm lost, and I'm lost
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
I'm handcuffed to the bishop and the barbershop liar
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
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Tue Mar 27, 2007 3:06 pm

Between clumps of hair
lay vast wastes of shiny spam
waiting to be slapped
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Wed Mar 28, 2007 2:08 am

Waiting to be slapped,
Norman twiddled his thumbs slow,
took inventory.
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Wed Mar 28, 2007 8:59 am

...took inventory.
No wonder business was bad -
the shelves were empty.
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"And I'm lost, and I'm lost
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
I'm handcuffed to the bishop and the barbershop liar
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
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Wed Mar 28, 2007 9:02 am

Took inventory,
invented Heart Surgery -
Dicky Tickery Doc
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Wed Mar 28, 2007 10:52 am

Dicky Tickery Doc
employed his cold stethoscope;
thumpity, thump, thump.
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Wed Mar 28, 2007 12:03 pm

"Thumpity, thump, thump"
moaned Bambi through swollen lips
"That rabbit can punch!"
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Wed Mar 28, 2007 2:06 pm

"That rabbit can punch!"
"Wascally Wabbit, that is."
Elmer Fuddism.
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Wed Mar 28, 2007 8:51 pm

Elmer Fuddism -
sticks his rifle down the hole
til it pokes his arse
Just because you're paranoid it doesn't mean they're not out to get you.
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Thu Mar 29, 2007 7:28 am

"... til it pokes his arse!"
the drill sergeant expounded,
"Now, fix bayonets!"
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"And I'm lost, and I'm lost
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
I'm handcuffed to the bishop and the barbershop liar
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
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Fri Mar 30, 2007 4:42 am

"Now, fix bayonets!"
The sharp blades kept slipping out,
stabbing army boots.
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Fri Mar 30, 2007 10:18 am

Stabbing army boots
with your twelve inch stiletto?-
Tell me, what's afoot?


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Sat Mar 31, 2007 1:12 am

Tell me, what's afoot?
Answer: 30.48
acentimeters!
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"And I'm lost, and I'm lost
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
I'm handcuffed to the bishop and the barbershop liar
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
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Sat Mar 31, 2007 10:07 am

"Ascentimeters?"
said the climber " - they're no use
when we're going down"
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Sun Apr 01, 2007 1:36 am

when we're going down
we bark shins on rising heads
of those coming up
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"And I'm lost, and I'm lost
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
I'm handcuffed to the bishop and the barbershop liar
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
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[Tom]
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Mon Apr 02, 2007 1:00 pm

Of those coming up,
they're all remarkably slow,
all except Otis
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Wed Apr 04, 2007 10:49 am

All except Otis,
got on the elevator
plunged down to their deaths.
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Thu Apr 05, 2007 7:28 am

plunged down to their deaths
the old pipes, so calcified,
eventually caved.
Cheers
Dave

"And I'm lost, and I'm lost
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
I'm handcuffed to the bishop and the barbershop liar
I'm lost at the bottom of the world
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[Tom]
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Sun Apr 08, 2007 7:03 am

Hear it, the music
Beer, wine or whiskey in here
All beauty,no fear
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