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mybelovedANAmosity
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Sat Nov 13, 2004 5:11 am

Maybe I am wrong
And there’s nothing for us here
All was washed away with my every tear

I have hope
That all my love has not been spent
I am honest but no longer innocent

Yes, I am flawed
But if you’d just look then you would see
That there’s so much more to me

---Kaitlin Jones
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Sat Nov 13, 2004 12:31 pm

Hi Kaitlin,

Welcome to the forum.

Nicely worked little poem. You manage to make the 'I' universal.
Reminds me a little of Coda by Louis MacNeice.

Cam
mybelovedANAmosity
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Sat Nov 13, 2004 6:53 pm

Thanks for your comment. This is one of my shortest poems. I plan on posting a few more but I like reviewing others as well. I have not read Coda but I will look into that. Thanks again.
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