Joseph of arrhythmia
Jumping Joe, or Jolting Joe, they called him.
He couldn't sing,
and he certainly couldn't dance,
but he had something -
unorthodox
and uncoordinated.
After many slightly jerky
years on the road,
he came at last to Glastonbury,
and that was it.
Sometimes you do something just for the title.
He couldn't sing,
and he certainly couldn't dance,
but he had something -
unorthodox
and uncoordinated.
After many slightly jerky
years on the road,
he came at last to Glastonbury,
and that was it.
Sometimes you do something just for the title.
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David,
Most amusing - but it needs a stronger ending IMHO
Geoff
Most amusing - but it needs a stronger ending IMHO
Geoff
Jumping Joe, or Jolting Joe, they called him. - Maybe you should choose one name -
Jolting Joe, they called him - (Jittering Joe?)
Why not leave out the last line and end on -
After many slightly jerky
years on the road,
he came at last to Glastonbury.
Pity you couldn't get a thorn in somewhere.
BTW - I hear BPA are trying to contact you. I thought Geoff might have mentioned it.
nice one
Barrie
Jolting Joe, they called him - (Jittering Joe?)
Why not leave out the last line and end on -
After many slightly jerky
years on the road,
he came at last to Glastonbury.
Pity you couldn't get a thorn in somewhere.
BTW - I hear BPA are trying to contact you. I thought Geoff might have mentioned it.
nice one
Barrie
After letting go of branches and walking through the ape gait, we managed to grasp what hands were really for......
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Barrie,
Haven't you heard? David now runs the BPA:
viewtopic.php?f=24&t=6063&hilit=bpa
BTW David,
Is Joe's band "The Crazy World of Arthur" ? (Saw them ON TOR once with Dickie Heart and the Pacemakers..)
Geoff
Haven't you heard? David now runs the BPA:
viewtopic.php?f=24&t=6063&hilit=bpa
BTW David,
Is Joe's band "The Crazy World of Arthur" ? (Saw them ON TOR once with Dickie Heart and the Pacemakers..)
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David I feel like a dolt but I don't understand the connection to place. I'd like to join in but I feel detached not understanding the references to the subject. How did other's get what I didn't?
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E / TDF,
Glastonbury is the site of an annual Rock festival PLUS the Abbey is associated with legends surrounding the
Holy Grail, Joseph of Arimathea and King Arthur
http://www.britainexpress.com/Myths/Glastonbury.htm
Geoff
Glastonbury is the site of an annual Rock festival PLUS the Abbey is associated with legends surrounding the
Holy Grail, Joseph of Arimathea and King Arthur
http://www.britainexpress.com/Myths/Glastonbury.htm
Geoff
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Yep - The heart condition arrhythmia obviously affects electric guitarists (sometimes rhythm, but mostly lead )TDF wrote:See I figured it was something like that... but I couldn't quite link that with heart palpitations. Is it just a play on words, or is there some relevence to that?
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Yep, I think I've cheated a bit with the arrhythmia thing. It sounds as though it ought to mean, besides the medical condition, a lack of rhythm. Unfortunately, I don't think it does. Am I abashed? Not a tall.
Ah, the BPA - just when I think I've escaped their clutches ... they're like the moonies, you know.
Cheers
David
Ah, the BPA - just when I think I've escaped their clutches ... they're like the moonies, you know.
Cheers
David
- That's what I first thought - I checked my (Chambers) dictionary, it can also mean simply having an irregular or interrupted rhythm, as well as the medical condition.David wrote:Yep, I think I've cheated a bit with the arrhythmia thing. It sounds as though it ought to mean, besides the medical condition, a lack of rhythm. Unfortunately, I don't think it does.
Barrie
After letting go of branches and walking through the ape gait, we managed to grasp what hands were really for......
Hurrah! Thanks Barrie. You've saved my pome.barrie wrote:- That's what I first thought - I checked my (Chambers) dictionary, it can also mean simply having an irregular or interrupted rhythm, as well as the medical condition.David wrote:Yep, I think I've cheated a bit with the arrhythmia thing. It sounds as though it ought to mean, besides the medical condition, a lack of rhythm. Unfortunately, I don't think it does.
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Ah now that I have that frame of reference I like it quite well. In this case, Jumping Joe Joe was not a man who thought he was a woman (argh did I say that?) I think the final line could take us a little further. Apart from this it made me smile. What more can you ask from a poem?
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You certainly did. Can I have some of what you're drinking, or smoking, or taking intravenously? Well, maybe not the latter.emuse wrote:In this case, Jumping Joe Joe was not a man who thought he was a woman (argh did I say that?)
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The chaps have mentioned the last line as well, e. Clearly some fixin' required.
Cheers
David
Hi David,
This took me a couple of reads, but I grinned both times. Consider using a capital on arryhtmia in the title... it would make the play on place seem stronger. The ending ("that was it") seems very ambiguous to me and I'd love to see the Glastonbury connection developed a little. Does he come to die of heart failure there? To perform?
Interesting read, David.
Cheers,
L
This took me a couple of reads, but I grinned both times. Consider using a capital on arryhtmia in the title... it would make the play on place seem stronger. The ending ("that was it") seems very ambiguous to me and I'd love to see the Glastonbury connection developed a little. Does he come to die of heart failure there? To perform?
Interesting read, David.
Cheers,
L
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Also a bit detatched from this one, however I am aware of the Grail stuff, been to the Glasto Tor and things, however I still didn't get it.
So, I'm not totally ignorant of it, partially perhaps, I wonder if you can do more in the poem to transfer some information to give it a bit of context? If that makes any sense. Maybe Geoff's point is where it is, the ending . . .
I dunno mate, hope it's vaguely useful.
me
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Also a bit detatched from this one, however I am aware of the Grail stuff, been to the Glasto Tor and things, however I still didn't get it.
So, I'm not totally ignorant of it, partially perhaps, I wonder if you can do more in the poem to transfer some information to give it a bit of context? If that makes any sense. Maybe Geoff's point is where it is, the ending . . .
I dunno mate, hope it's vaguely useful.
me
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Clearly the BPA (Bad Puns Anonymous) is not up to the task of monitoring PG, so I'm afraid I'm going to have to complain to OFPUN.emuse wrote:Ah now that I have that frame of reference I like it quite well. In this case, Jumping Joe Joe was not a man who thought he was a woman (argh did I say that?) I think the final line could take us a little further. Apart from this it made me smile. What more can you ask from a poem?
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