Lost Boy
Mathew
Welcome to the forum. Have a check of the rules - usually a couple of decent crits are asked for to accompany each poem posted. Have a go - you will find doing crits helps you write and encourages others to comment on your work.
For now I would say that the inconsistency in punctutation isn't helping your piece but some interesting ideas.
Elphin
Welcome to the forum. Have a check of the rules - usually a couple of decent crits are asked for to accompany each poem posted. Have a go - you will find doing crits helps you write and encourages others to comment on your work.
For now I would say that the inconsistency in punctutation isn't helping your piece but some interesting ideas.
Elphin