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moondrifter
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Sun Mar 15, 2009 10:54 am

Title:Night

Verse:
A strange raven rapped at my window
he left me the key to an unknown door
the next night he rapped again
leaving me the map to some strange glen

chorus:
i took the map and walked these roads
i held the key and stalked the night
in vain i ignored all screams heard
i reached the glen by morns first light

verse:
i opened the door to some strange crypt
many hours with the departed i slept
i was woken by rapping at the window
he left a map on the crypt floor


chorus:
i took the map and walked these roads
i held the key and stalked the night
in vain i ignored all screams heard
i reached the glen by morn's first light

bridge:
i saw a graveyard and an unnamed stone
sparse mutterings revealed i was not alone

verse:
and on this grave was written my name
the raven held a key with eternity
written in flames,a hooded man he
sliced the moon in half and pointed north
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Sun Mar 22, 2009 1:26 am

Very dramatic narrative in these lyrics!
Very reminiscent of a lot of romantic poetry!
Very dark and epic!

Would be lovely if we could have some chords or a recording or something to give us an idea of the music. :)

All the best
Phil
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Wed Mar 25, 2009 1:14 am

This is cool, what genre is the music this is set to?
It reminds me of a book I read when I was younger.
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Wed Sep 23, 2009 11:19 am

I would put this into Major c with 2 minors a rolling stones melody as it were.

It's cool. You have balanced your lyrics well ....do you play guitar?

C, D, A, Em, G, C, these are the chords.

xhttp://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jmLJWumAFBQ
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