Monsoon
A splash, albeit an expected one,
turquoise and amber rippling outwards.
Seraph, wears dark and light shades
while clothes are getting torn for
a few quiet men, all gifted but despised.
Divinity, completely undressed
ruefully deploys her full frontal form
to pacify an eager, angry mob.
Once! They labelled her as a cradling slut!
She whimpers until her innermost
folds, are lapped by hungry tongues.
A shudder of her twitching form
to rally a chant from the gifted, quiet few,
slung in a twisted heap by the open door
like a pair of wet stockings
that clung to the curves of her legs.
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Last edited by Danté on Sat Jun 26, 2010 7:19 am, edited 2 times in total.
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
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I enjoyed this one again,you seem to have a habit of writing great poetry.
another vision filled write, also pretty deep in my view.
Great stuff between the lines also.
Great write.
B.
another vision filled write, also pretty deep in my view.
Great stuff between the lines also.
Great write.
B.
Poems everybody...poems.. the laddie fancies himself a poet!..Pink Floyd-The wall.
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Tim,
Wow, this was a powerful thing. The images are so strong, I admire your ability to show such vivid color with so few words. Wow, again. It certainly isn't a comforting piece to read, quite unsettling, uncomfortable.
Having some experience with institutions filled with men like you described, I could relate to an underlying frustration.
Very interesting material. I love the curve of her legs with wet stockings. Great read. Thanks.
The audio is such a rich addition! I loved that!
Suzanne
Wow, this was a powerful thing. The images are so strong, I admire your ability to show such vivid color with so few words. Wow, again. It certainly isn't a comforting piece to read, quite unsettling, uncomfortable.
Having some experience with institutions filled with men like you described, I could relate to an underlying frustration.
Very interesting material. I love the curve of her legs with wet stockings. Great read. Thanks.
The audio is such a rich addition! I loved that!
Suzanne
Powerful write Dante, I loved your recitation once again. Interesting title. I'm hearing this repeatedly to get the inner meaning. Captivating stuff.
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Hi, Tim.
I can't add much to what the others have said. This is really very good. Your delivery on the audio adds much to the overall feel, and helps solidify the words.
Cheers,
- Neil.
I can't add much to what the others have said. This is really very good. Your delivery on the audio adds much to the overall feel, and helps solidify the words.
Cheers,
- Neil.
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