Four porcelain towers stand around,
which gracefully point heaven bound,
ten thousand silver bells sweet
have they, whose tinkling sounds run out to greet
the happiness that dwells in summer's air,
where silver shade has not a care,
singing forth her answers to those sounds
she awakens all the flowers in the palace grounds
the goldfish in the lakes jump and glisten
within the deep pools of green amethystine
shades. The wren, she dances on,
in a Mozart multicoloured feathery sing-a-long,
while golden-robin blushes with ardour
to meet her lover by the harbour,
in the garden of the Emperor's Ring
where thirty-thousand nightingales sing.
The Palace Of Li Wang Ho
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backinblack
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Hi, it amazes me! how do you come up with this stuff?
I found this really vivid and serne in the vibe it gives off.
some really nice visuals in there,is sounds like the kind of place i'd like to see.
don't know why, but the opening reminded me of the game tomb raider!
Loved it,thanks.
BinB.
I found this really vivid and serne in the vibe it gives off.
some really nice visuals in there,is sounds like the kind of place i'd like to see.
don't know why, but the opening reminded me of the game tomb raider!
Loved it,thanks.
BinB.
Poems everybody...poems.. the laddie fancies himself a poet!..Pink Floyd-The wall.
Lovely,
Where is it? The name doesn't sound English. It's a beautiful scenery you depicted.
You have two "silver" in S1. Who is she in S1? Is she a wren as in S2?
I enjoyed the scenes you portrayed.
Best,
Lake
Where is it? The name doesn't sound English. It's a beautiful scenery you depicted.
You have two "silver" in S1. Who is she in S1? Is she a wren as in S2?
I enjoyed the scenes you portrayed.
Best,
Lake
Wow. This is restrained in the extreme, L. You see, sometimes less is more. In fact I actually know someone called Les Moore. Nice chap.
Your line lengths are a bit erratic again, but I like the amethystine and the Mozart.
You have a singing soul, don't you.
Cheers
David
Your line lengths are a bit erratic again, but I like the amethystine and the Mozart.
You have a singing soul, don't you.
Cheers
David
L has far more than singing soul, Big Fella!
She's more talent in her lil pinky than most have nor realise.
Lovely, this was written far too quickly... which limits your usual over wordiness.... COOOOLLLLL!
Now without adding squat in lenght to this, show em what you can really do with it (depth wise)... Pretty please
102 reads and only 3 comments....tis bloody rude if you ask me!
J
She's more talent in her lil pinky than most have nor realise.
Lovely, this was written far too quickly... which limits your usual over wordiness.... COOOOLLLLL!
Now without adding squat in lenght to this, show em what you can really do with it (depth wise)... Pretty please
102 reads and only 3 comments....tis bloody rude if you ask me!
J
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Dedicated to David Carradine: (The Palace Of Li Wang Ho)
I say this with a sad note in my heart. I wrote thie poem on thursday last week. I've only just found out today that
he died (last night) in a bangkok hotel with a rope round his neck. I always loved his portrayal in the series Kung Fu in
the 1970s, playing the part of a young Shaolin priest. Much later on he played a starring role in the Quentin Tarantino
'Kill Bill' films. He wrote a memoir called the Spirit of Shaolin and continued to make instructional videos on Tai Chi.
I only hope he finds such 'a palace' as this somewhere. Condolences to all those that loved him.
L xxx
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Thank you again for All your kind words and interest. Much felt and loved.
I say this with a sad note in my heart. I wrote thie poem on thursday last week. I've only just found out today that
he died (last night) in a bangkok hotel with a rope round his neck. I always loved his portrayal in the series Kung Fu in
the 1970s, playing the part of a young Shaolin priest. Much later on he played a starring role in the Quentin Tarantino
'Kill Bill' films. He wrote a memoir called the Spirit of Shaolin and continued to make instructional videos on Tai Chi.
I only hope he finds such 'a palace' as this somewhere. Condolences to all those that loved him.
L xxx
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Thank you again for All your kind words and interest. Much felt and loved.
You do realise he sucked up (due to bigots of the day) to make his way past Bruce Lee for that part, dontcha?.... and here I were thinking it a play Cho Wang Li....as in his Ho-ho-ho!
Oh hang on, I was right lol
Ah you mushy girlee you
J
Oh hang on, I was right lol
Ah you mushy girlee you
J
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peterkiggin
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I really loved this poem as I write similarly myself , my mind is awash with words and thoughts of delicate trinkets of golden chapters,you obviously have a talent and I would like to converse with you in the future from peterkiggin .