Down among the dead men
Drown those sorrows, drink, drink
down among the dead men.
Dutch courage, clink, clink,
a drop, a dram, a generous drop
of double Dutch, double-entry talk,
ten shots shared in good spirits;
then a bad case of double vision.
Down among the dead men
"Do not feel lonely, the entire universe is inside you" - Rumi
You know, i love short poems.. Im reallylazy, God forgive me. But i think you should take this further, and explore the dead men dialog more... I think this down morbid tempo bar talk could have some real feet...
You ever see that film Glengarry Glen Ross?
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=z9mvTHSV ... re=related
The down on your luck, castrate bar philosophy; a woeful lament makes lovely poetry... no?
You ever see that film Glengarry Glen Ross?
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=z9mvTHSV ... re=related
The down on your luck, castrate bar philosophy; a woeful lament makes lovely poetry... no?