( Tanka poems )
I.
blind beggar
croons a strange tune
inside a local train
coins in his bowl
rattle with the jerks
II.
ice cream vendor
wipes his forehead
in cloudless June
squeaking handle
of a deep tube-well
III.
Sunday morning
rocks with
‘Smoke on the water’
two flippant grasshoppers
near the lake
Kolkata snapshots – III
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- Helen Bywater
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Hi,
It's good to see more of this series. I love the image of the "flippant grasshoppers" - that's my favourite line. Just one point - we'd normally say "in a bowl", not "on a bowl".
Good work!
Helen
It's good to see more of this series. I love the image of the "flippant grasshoppers" - that's my favourite line. Just one point - we'd normally say "in a bowl", not "on a bowl".
Good work!
Helen
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Thanks Helen. Sorry for the error. Edited.
Thanks Lovely for the time.
Thanks Lovely for the time.