[ String of Tanka ]
behind
a rain curtain
her blurred face
on the mirror-plane
fading fingerprints
her smile echoes
from distant valleys
all around me
an aimless rain
moribund reflections
monsoon-kisses
enliven the embers
I ruminate
what if a sandalwood
loses its scent
walking by a lake
I discover
full grown lotus
embraced by fog
and cottonwood seeds
Cottonwood seeds
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What a lovely feel good poem really like it, smooth sounding easy on the eye and very vivid words, love all of it, " What if sandalwood looses its scent. " and the final line, "Embraced by fog and cotton wood seeds." absolutely wonderful.Think the title is perfect and drew me to your poem. I thought what a lovely title I will have a look at that, glad I did wasn't disappointed. Thank you for brightening up my wet Friday morning. X ![Wink :wink:](./images/smilies/icon_wink.gif)
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Thanks for the reply SUSAN-MORRIS3.
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Cant believe only I have commented on your poem, maybe its the title putting people of reading it? personally I loved the title.X ![Wink :wink:](./images/smilies/icon_wink.gif)
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Thanks SUSan, thanks David. I 'm trying my hands on Tanka . Smiles. ![Very Happy :D](./images/smilies/icon_biggrin.gif)
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