Pompeii : August 24, 79 AD

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arunansu
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Wed Dec 02, 2009 4:20 am

throat-slit volcano
ogre erupts with joy
watching blood-rivers

eleven humans
trapped in a hole
buried with ash

eyes, petrified:
Is this the Apocalypse?
the ogre nods
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Wed Dec 02, 2009 7:49 am

Eleven humans.......why? I Know why!


There is clearly a miltonic influence here. You draw pictures of feasts and dances

It is a bed of pain, Aru, but what I loved in this is your honesty...ashes and smashes
the dead will lie Aru. Ash to ash.

Weep not, but in the poetry child it becomes you. This is good, because it is heartfelt,
but more than anything else...... deeply honest.



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Wed Dec 02, 2009 10:16 am

Thanks Lovely. This was written "on the cuff". I saw a pic on the net of 11 human remains, covered with plaster cast. May be that drove me to write the piece. Smiles.
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Wed Dec 02, 2009 10:25 am

Hi Arun,
like this a lot, great imagery, 'throat-slit volcano', nice and precise, short and sweet. Great stuff!
Kimi
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Wed Dec 02, 2009 10:27 am

You are so much to my hidden eyes. You are truly a poet!
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Wed Dec 02, 2009 12:15 pm

Thank you Kimibob and Lovely for your encouragement.
Smiles.
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Wed Dec 02, 2009 2:35 pm

That was great!!!
What excitement/fear captured.

Aru, wonderful.
Quite an opening.

Very nice,
Suzanne
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Wed Dec 02, 2009 3:06 pm

Thank you Suzanne for the reply and the time on this.
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