Haiku Train

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Tue Jan 12, 2010 6:02 pm

to look at the stars
with only your naked eyes
how far can you hear?
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Tue Jan 12, 2010 11:27 pm

How far can you hear?
If six turned out to be nine
Jimi wouldn't mind.
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Wed Jan 13, 2010 1:09 am

Jimi wouldn't mind
a bakers dozen i think
for a penny each
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Fri Jan 15, 2010 9:27 am

For a penny each
slipping the ferry over
our river of dreams.
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Fri Jan 15, 2010 2:16 pm

our rivers of dreams
meandering mingle
then twist together.
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Mon Jan 18, 2010 9:37 am

Then twist together
like the afternoon lovers
in a French movie.
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Tue Jan 19, 2010 8:27 pm

In a French movie
you held your honey latte,
she kissed your cold cheek.
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Wed Jan 20, 2010 8:56 pm

She kissed your cold cheek,
then pulling up your trousers
said "Let's go indoors..."
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Thu Jan 21, 2010 5:01 am

said "let's go indoors"
fumble in vacuumed entrance
warm burst fogs glasses.
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Thu Jan 21, 2010 6:07 pm

warm burst fogs glasses
let me clean them whilst i stand
over this chip pan
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Sat Jan 23, 2010 3:34 am

over this chip pan
considering - why don't I
just buy oven chips?
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Sat Jan 23, 2010 4:57 am

just buy oven chips?
no chippy will do for me
wont help my diet
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Sat Jan 23, 2010 3:26 pm

wont help my diet
to improve my libido
but It'll be fun.
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
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Sat Jan 23, 2010 3:39 pm

but it'll be fun...
honey, it's not happening
she said, no, never.
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Sat Jan 23, 2010 3:47 pm

she said, no, never
while her body language spoke
of her willingness.
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
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Sat Jan 23, 2010 3:57 pm

of her willingness
he heard her speak of often
she smiled... and said, no.
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Sat Jan 23, 2010 4:05 pm

she smiled... and said, no
while his response was simply
to go look elsewhere.
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
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Sat Jan 23, 2010 4:30 pm

To go look elsewhere?
No bakery held her options;
just buns in baskets.
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Sat Jan 23, 2010 4:37 pm

just buns in baskets
and half empty flasks of tea,
he'd asked for coffee.
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
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Sat Jan 23, 2010 4:41 pm

he'd asked for coffee
she'd offer him java cream
take away ready.
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Sat Jan 23, 2010 4:44 pm

take away ready
or not, just hot beverage
in a plastic cup.
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
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Sat Jan 23, 2010 4:54 pm

in a plastic cup,
though hot enough to burn;
he would need a nurse.
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Sat Jan 23, 2010 5:05 pm

he would need a nurse
or someone dressed just like one
to brighten his day.
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
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Sat Jan 23, 2010 5:22 pm

to brighten his day
she's always eager to dance
in just her stockings.
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Sun Jan 24, 2010 11:05 am

in just her stockings
which he used as a fan belt
on his bright red car.
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
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