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Tue Feb 16, 2010 5:51 pm

endure together
missyllabisation --
you know it's so worth it.
War does not determine who is right - only who is left. (Bertrand Russell)
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Tue Feb 16, 2010 6:14 pm

you know, it is so worth it
that wahoo! and wiggle exclaimed,
you shy, tender boy.
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Tue Feb 16, 2010 9:11 pm

Yo! Shy, tenda boy!
You so wet rain runs away!
Poet in da 'hood!
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Thu Feb 18, 2010 11:30 am

Poet in da hood
called himself a witty monk
writing her love poems.
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Fri Feb 19, 2010 11:03 am

writing her love poems
was never on his mind
she was pressed as coal.
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Sat Feb 20, 2010 1:36 pm

she was pressed as coal
yet far from a girl's best friend
of claw-set carbon
War does not determine who is right - only who is left. (Bertrand Russell)
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Sat Feb 20, 2010 4:03 pm

With claw set carbon
her romantic fire was fuelled;
Bells and cake and lace...
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Mon Feb 22, 2010 2:05 pm

Bells and cake and lace,
confetti in the gutter --
memento vivere.
War does not determine who is right - only who is left. (Bertrand Russell)
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Fri Feb 26, 2010 12:06 pm

memento vivere;
the children's heights growing up
marked on kitchen door.
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Fri Feb 26, 2010 2:28 pm

Marked on kitchen door:
last night's scarlet bolognaise
hurled across the room.
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Fri Feb 26, 2010 6:13 pm

hurdled across rooms
busting through doors to reach it
there's so little time.
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Sat Feb 27, 2010 10:59 am

there's so little time
on a tiny little clock --
micronometer
War does not determine who is right - only who is left. (Bertrand Russell)
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Sun Feb 28, 2010 7:43 pm

micronometer
can you measure my thought life
the edges of each
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Tue Mar 02, 2010 11:06 pm

The edges of each
small wound are sore in bright light,
so I hide them here.
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Tue Mar 02, 2010 11:23 pm

So I hide them here
all the words and lists of names
mysterious mail.
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Wed Mar 03, 2010 12:12 pm

mysterious mail
flashing up on my p c
a virus mabe
It always happens when you least expect it. AC
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Wed Mar 03, 2010 12:17 pm

a virus mabe
i shall disembroil myself
and just delete it
It always happens when you least expect it. AC
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Wed Mar 03, 2010 12:39 pm

and just delete it,
no one wants to be cheated --
by the 'Bad' medic.
War does not determine who is right - only who is left. (Bertrand Russell)
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Fri Mar 05, 2010 6:10 pm

The bad medic
decim-ated patient faith
and bled their trust dry.
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Thu Mar 11, 2010 9:34 am

‘ands bled their trust. Dry
mouths choked on over-baked faith.
Eyes wept sincere tears.


It looks like I halted the train with that last one, so please forgive the liberty taken with this one. I hope the train can move more freely now.
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Thu Mar 11, 2010 12:40 pm

Eyes wept sincere tears
as he watched the broken train
moving free again.
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Fri Mar 12, 2010 4:59 pm

Moving. Free again.
The tar-stained mammoth set off
in search of feathers.
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Mon Mar 15, 2010 10:37 am

In search of feathers,
ambitious lizards looking
to scale the blue sky.
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Tue Mar 16, 2010 12:12 pm

To scale the blue sky
in search of some distant dreams
for my inner self
It always happens when you least expect it. AC
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Wed Mar 17, 2010 11:08 pm

For my inner self
I unchained inhibitions
I let myself go
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