Haiku: Sequence for B

[Crustyman]

Haiku: Sequence for B
(b. April 1929, d. March 1998)

(i)
March sunshine gleams on
pale raw earth; catches my throat
at your green farewell.

(ii)
All summer our cat
wanders each room to find you.
You do not return.

(iii)
October rain slaps
leaves that droop in our garden.
How can we share that ?

(iv)
Two crows, mated, hunch
in the winter sycamore,
warmer than we are.

[Lake]

Hello Crusty,

I think this a crafty write. The feel of loss is poignantly delivered in four seasons.

"catches my throat
at your green farewell."

Heartbreaking, touching.

"our cat
wanders each room to find you"

Even the pet misses you.

"How can we share that ?"

The mood in rainy days is the most melancholy.

"Two crows,
warmer than we are."

Like the comparision.

All the best

Lake

[arunansu]

Crustyman,
I loved the moving write. Love the string of images, though I would have opted to go without punctuations. yet that's a minor. Very poignant.

[Danté]

crusty,

I can only reiterate what Lake and Aru have said, it's a good sequence. I especially liked the idea of two crows being used as a comparison in the closing lines, especially in the bleak context that you have them. Yes, a pleasant, enjoyable and thoughtful read.

all the best

Danté

[David]

This is good, Crusty. Good and sad. Says it all - or most of it - in a few words.

Cheers

David