Drenched

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arunansu
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Sun Apr 11, 2010 4:58 am

This morning
with my arms open
I savor a photon-drizzle.

Satiate my thirsty eyes, April,
with the unceasing fall
of your radiant droplets.

Molten gold streams down
my shoulders, my middle aged
ribcage.

This morning, wind blows its oboe
on emerald wish-fields.

I’m a pauper
lost
in your abundance.
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Sun Apr 11, 2010 5:46 pm

Arun, this is nice loved...the wind blowing it's oboe on those emerald wish-fields :D
It always happens when you least expect it. AC
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Tue Apr 13, 2010 4:19 am

Thank you Anniecat for being here.Smiles.
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Mon Apr 19, 2010 3:35 am

It sure feels humbling when you're drenched with the tears of heaven. The imagery-metaphor combination is indeed, excellent.

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Mon Apr 19, 2010 10:48 am

Thank you Bery for your comments. Glad that you've liked it. :D
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