Wordless (Free Verse)

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Durante
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Fri Jun 04, 2010 8:00 pm

Like is love enough when
one's refrain is so absorbed.
A song deferred by the
innocence and inexperience
that cradles the suckling chlid
(name known, not spoken).
There is time for formalities,
time enough for civil words.
Behind a fear of the absurd
is a heart's true pattem of beat,
to which far more than this foot will tap!
By the meter or the mile,
the passion or its effort,
comes a reification of
what was already concrete.
Assuaging the taste for seriousness,
dispending this belief in that hidden
God on his machine
and gravitating to that Place
where lips say what hearts mean.
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Sat Jun 05, 2010 4:36 pm

"Wordless" Very appropriate title considering I am speechless and barely able to contain myself after reading a poem of this calibre.

What a wonderful writer you are, I don´t think I'll be able to put words to paper with any real enthusiasm now I've seen the work of a true master.
I'm sure us humble folks would greatly benefit from your poetic wisdom, should you feel generous enough to peruse a few of our efforts and give some small insight into how it is possible to render them a little closer to such obvious perfection.

In total awe

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to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
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Sat Jun 05, 2010 4:52 pm

You're praise seems a touch too fantastical to be sincere - are you being serious?
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Sat Jun 05, 2010 5:32 pm

In all seriousness it is in my opinion, considering the contextual aspects of its posting an appropriate response.

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to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
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Sat Jun 05, 2010 6:32 pm

Durante, I think you'll only get a few more serious crits when you catch up with the ones you've missed doing. The forum runs on give and take, remember.

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