The Black Coach of Sorrow

[Antcliff]

“...Where the black coach of sorrow has taken you...”
Gloomy Sunday, perfomed by Artie Shaw+Band.
(Cheers Nash...)

But...

what of the Steamroller of Happiness,
Kept in the Big Garage of Contentment?
See how it flattens the Bent Bicycles
Of Bitterness and the Handbags of Hate.
And rolls to the Fair of Finer Feeling,
To the Red Carousel of Arousal,
Far from the madding Hairline of Regret.
The Vibrator of Lust is much better
Than the Twin Toothbrushes of Tension,
Or so they say in the Tescos of Un-truth.
I myself ride the Rocket of Reason,
In the Ejector Seat of Ecstasy,
To the Promised Land of the Highest Love.

[Vincent Turner]

Seems different from your usual tone.

Much to enjoy.

I think this could have gone horribly wrong, but is saved by clever and funny cliches. For me the poem works because it does not take itself over seriously, and in that sense, comes across, in a strange sort of way- quite serious??? I am sure I have not made much sense! What I am trying to say is, there is a freedom to the poem, because it is not trying to be serious it is able to address something. No?- oh, well I tried!!!

I really dig this one.

Nicely done.

Best Regards

Vincent

[Antcliff]

Thanks Vince,

Yeh, I know exactly what you mean. (And you put it well I think.) I write..though don't post here..a good deal of whimsical ones and quite often they seem to wave at something dark as they pass with their silly face. I think a lot of the best whimsical ones do.

I was just so caught up in the song Nash posted which features the phrase "Black Coach of Sorrow"..vehicles of emotions started to pop into my head. There is no subtext.

Although as I type this, I know there is.

Seth

[David]

Gosh, that is a chilling song, isn't it? I know it, of course (in the Billie Holiday version), but I hadn't realised just how suicidal the lyrics are. I just thought it was a wet Sunday! (Fool.)

Seems different from your usual tone.

Oddly enough, I don't agree with that. I think there's a strong vein of whimsy in your work - I think of your bouncing angels and your wandering kilts, for starters - and I also think you're a great proselytizer for the virtues of settled love, if I can call it that ... so this seems to me to be right in your groove.

And I like it.

Cheers

David

[Nash]

Great fun, Seth! This one gets the thumbs up from Mrs. Nash too.

[Antcliff]

Nash,
thanks, well, I am delighted to hear about your good lady
David,
chilling indeed.
Good shout. Insofar as it is about anything.."the virtues of settled love".

Seth,
driving away on the Kettle of Contentment.

[Ros]

Much fin. Or fun, even, if I can hit the right keys.
I wonder about not having the tescos? It introduces a touch of the cynical and real-world into something that's in fantasy land.

Ros

[Antcliff]

I wonder about not having the tescos? It introduces a touch of the cynical and real-world into something that's in fantasy land.

Thanks Ros,
hmm, yeh, maybe so. Will have to ponder.

Seth,
...exits rhyming "Tesco" with "No".

[Ros]

I wonder about not having the tescos? It introduces a touch of the cynical and real-world into something that's in fantasy land.

Thanks Ros,
hmm, yeh, maybe so. Will have to ponder.

Seth,
...exits rhyming "Tesco" with "No".

They're such an easy target!

[twoleftfeet]

Ant,

This is brilliant - very Pratchett-esque!

The Bent Bicycles of Bitterness

May I make a suggestion? - The Twin Beds of Tension

Geoff

[Suzanne]

Seth,

So much fun! Many pleasant sounds to match the appealing images.
A big garage of contentment, oh, yes please.

Over the top, yes.
Whimsical you.

Ejector seat of ecstasy... Lol.

Who wouldn't smile at that?
Suzanne

[Antcliff]

Thanks Sooz!
Hooray. The way of whimsy is the true way.

George!
well, thank you, hmm........I must read some Pratchett.
I do like your suggestion...I think I will take it.

[Magpie Jane]

O megollygorship, Seth . . . this is terrifyingly terrific. Vehicles of emotion! I love the idea of it so much I could eat it.

Exactly what I needed right here and now.

Jane


PS: If you're going to read some Pratchett, try "Good Omens" (he wrote it in collaboration with Neil Gaiman).

[Antcliff]

Jane,
thank you. Hooray. Vehicles of emotion are still in my head.

Well, I will read "Good Omen", definitely. Looking now.

Seth