Once upon a time
Is always, everywhere, everytime
No different
Not significant
A believed movement
Second by second
Tick-tock
Getting somewhere
Tick-tock
Still going
Tick-tock
Not where yet?
Time is still, motionless
An imaginery yet believed importance
Living by the grandfather clock
Grandfathers dead
A life gone, rushed by the endless tick-tock
Killed by the ringing alarm clock
No need for time
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The last five lines are the best here really...
"An imaginary yet believed importance
living by the grandfather clock
Grandfathers dead
A life gone, rushed by the endless tick tock
Killed by the ringing alarm clock".
There's a lovely flow and feel to those, that doesn't quite occur otherwise.
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SEAN KINSELLA
The last five lines are the best here really...
"An imaginary yet believed importance
living by the grandfather clock
Grandfathers dead
A life gone, rushed by the endless tick tock
Killed by the ringing alarm clock".
There's a lovely flow and feel to those, that doesn't quite occur otherwise.
BEST REGARDS
SEAN KINSELLA
Thanks for the comment Sean I think the ending is the best part for me personally. I like the idea behind the rest, but i don't think it's as poetic.
.Time holds a fascination for me - Nobody can explain what it is or if it is, it's always with us but no-one can ever pin it down. It's easy to complicate the subject in a poem but you managed not to do that - Good ending.
I intended to post one called 'Chronos'. I'll shelve that one for now.
About the title, 'No need for time'- Someone once said that time stops things from happening all at once - Maybe there is a need. Who knows?
Nice one.
I intended to post one called 'Chronos'. I'll shelve that one for now.
About the title, 'No need for time'- Someone once said that time stops things from happening all at once - Maybe there is a need. Who knows?
Nice one.